Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? 

Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Education is the key of success.You can achive your goal always struggle,as people said always struggle to achive win and gain. Now in this modern era technology can make the men faster. It is often argued that in some educational system,children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In the light of my personal experience i agree with this view point foreign language study is an important part of education.This is because technology can very important roll in our daily life and also our business. In the field of import export we really need to know foreign language.We can communicate with other people if we have known about communication skills.Moreover foreign language study give us potential benefits of the life of business.Additionally ,when we want to move for higher education for abrod it is our first requirment for learning.

Secondly, we can make a plan to visit other forn countries for sum perpose we should make shure about their language .But on the otherhand if we donot know about their language skill we have fac

e many problems,like how we can commiunicate,how we take order in thNow in the concluding paragraph i may quaot assert an example of digital advancment to touch with new technology , through the expert of different language .So it is very important to learn more foreign languages

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear opinion that foreign-language study is important, and you give relevant potential benefits, including communication in business, travel, and access to higher education abroad. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than explained with specific examples, and the discussion of business and technology is unclear in places. The response also ends abruptly, with the travel sentence cut off, so the final point is not fully developed. The required minimum was not met: the response contains 206 words, 44 short of 250; 20 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count. To strengthen the response, explain how each benefit helps learners and add a concrete example, while completing the discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response, with an opening, a first point introduced by “Moreover,” and a second point signalled by “Secondly.” Your position is also stated early, which gives the reader a general direction. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, and links between them are not always clear. The travel discussion breaks off at “how we take order in th,” and the concluding sentence introduces digital advancement without clearly connecting it to the earlier points. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, each main benefit, and the conclusion; then make each paragraph develop one central idea and use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “foreign languages,” “higher education,” “communicate,” and “technology,” so the reader can identify the main subject and some intended benefits. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning unclear. For example, “potential benefits of the life of business” does not express a precise idea, and “make the men faster” is difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “achive,” “abrod,” and “commiunicate” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of topic-specific phrases and check spelling; for instance, describe how language skills “support international business” or “help students pursue higher education overseas.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to combine ideas, for example with “if” clauses and the contrast introduced by “But.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to control, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently interrupt the message. Examples include “foreign language study give us,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “if we have known about communication skills,” where the verb form does not fit the intended meaning. The travel sentence is also unfinished, and missing spaces after full stops make sentence boundaries unclear. Practise writing complete sentences with one main idea, then check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and punctuation before adding more complex structures.

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