Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? 

Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in my opinion foriegn language is importand to people have dream to working in abroad,knowing thier language is big benifits that you can communicate them also you can adapt thier culture and you can learn thier community what is happen to thier country ,it also give you knowledge to people to have opportunity to work to other country,other country have a particular law that before you can work to other country is to learn thier language and its very useful and its a parts of life in abroad like if you want to buy to sm mall you can freely communicate without hasle

people dont want to study foriegn language have dont educatinal attainment because they didnt go to school at have the opportunity to study foriegn languange.other reason is the financial problem poor people prefer to work thier country because some of them are contented to thier life and also they want thier family beside thier life one example dont want to learn foriegn language is not necesary they thinking that no need to learn because its useless and connot use in everday life and also some of them they love thier own laguage

inconclussion people have oppurtunity to work abroad is prefer to learn foriegn language that they use to communicate and to learn also ther culture that give them benifits that what is happen to othier country.Peolpe that dont wan to learn foriegn language is lack of money and financial problem that they dont have the opportunity to learn foriegn laguage and also its was not useful for every daylife

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic by describing practical benefits, especially communicating and adapting to life abroad, and you give a clear view that language learning is useful for people who hope to work overseas. However, the response only partly answers the full task: the benefits are mostly tied to employment and daily life abroad, while broader educational benefits are not explored. The second paragraph discusses why some people do not study a language, but this is not directly requested and takes space away from explaining why language study matters in education. Several points, such as learning about another culture and gaining work opportunities, are repeated rather than developed with a specific example or explanation. To strengthen the response, address both questions directly and support each main benefit with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from benefits, to reasons some people do not study languages, and then to a conclusion. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these sections. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because many ideas are joined into long strings, often with repeated “and also” or “because.” The second paragraph’s focus on financial barriers and personal preference also interrupts the answer’s main line of argument. References such as “they” and “it” are sometimes unclear, so readers must infer what they refer to. Use shorter sentences, give each paragraph one clear purpose, and connect ideas with precise transitions. A conclusion should briefly restate your position rather than repeat several earlier points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “communicate,” “culture,” “opportunity,” “financial problem,” and “community.” These words help convey your main ideas, but the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly references to working abroad and learning another language. Frequent spelling errors, including “foriegn,” “benifits,” and “oppurtunity,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “have dream to working in abroad” and “buy to sm mall.” Build a wider set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling carefully. Prefer natural collocations such as “work overseas,” “adapt to a new culture,” and “shop independently.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to express connected ideas and gives reasons using forms such as “because” and “if,” but sentence structures are mostly long, loosely joined clauses. Frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries make some meanings difficult to follow. For example, “it also give you knowledge” needs subject–verb agreement, while “people to have opportunity to work to other country” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Punctuation is also limited, so several separate ideas run together. Practise writing one complete idea per sentence, checking that each sentence has a subject and a correctly formed verb. Then add a few controlled complex sentences, such as a clear “because” clause, rather than joining many clauses together.

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