Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
A growing number of people rely on restaurants and convenience food (frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this contemporay,masses love to eat frozen as well as packaged meals reather then making food by own .Draft of this would disscuss advantages and disadvantages in subsequent paragraphs before reaching on conclusion
First and foremost, there are numerous advantage of packaged meals as well as frozen food.First of all , it helps to save majority of time of individuals because these type of foods are be prepared ,so they donot need to spend too much time on it.Owning to this,masses spend time with their family's members . Moreover, they become fit because individuals do gym as wll as yoga instead of making home food .Due to this, they are living healthy lifestyle
On the other hand, there are several disadvantages of packaged food and frozen foods .Farther more ,masses suffer from numerous ailments as these type of foods have majority of camicals to increas life of food which put negative effects on individuals's health. Beside it,it puts negtive effects on well power because frozen foods have serval type of soses and ingreadites which are very harmful for them
In conclusion, Nodoubt, nawa dayes individuals love to eat ou
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 189 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is significantly curtailed. While the essay identifies both advantages (time-saving, fitness) and disadvantages (health risks, chemical additives), the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting examples or depth. The conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, which indicates a failure to fully address the task requirements. To improve, you must expand your body paragraphs with specific examples and ensure the essay is completed in full.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost' and 'On the other hand', which provide a rudimentary structure. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is unfinished, which disrupts the overall flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of a coherent conclusion makes the logical progression of the argument difficult to follow. To improve, focus on linking sentences more fluidly and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, completed structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'contemporay' (contemporary), 'reather' (rather), 'disscuss' (discuss), 'wll' (well), 'camicals' (chemicals), 'increas' (increase), 'negtive' (negative), 'soses' (sauces), and 'ingreadites' (ingredients). These errors, combined with the use of informal phrasing like 'masses' and 'nawa dayes', restrict the range of vocabulary. To achieve a higher band, you need to focus on accurate spelling and use a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary related to nutrition and lifestyle.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('masses love', 'these type of foods are be prepared'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. The unfinished nature of the final sentence also leaves the grammatical structure incomplete. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors in tense and pluralization.
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