Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

A growing number of people rely on restaurants and convenience food (frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern era, people want to do their work in less time, There is one bog example that a number of people want to eat food from restaurants or convenience stores rather than making it home. There are some advantages and disadvantages, which i will discuss in coming paragraphs.

Here are some advantages for this situation, first of all is saving time. in this busy era, everyone wants to save time, so they order food from restaurants. They work 9to5 or more. So, they prefer to order rather than cooking it at home. If we talk about an international students they do not have their families with them. So, they are 50% depended on restaurants and eat food. They have to manage their time for sleep, study, travelling as well as work. In result, they can have more time to spend with their families talk to them. People with families can have meetings with their children and parents to make their bonding strong.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages for this situation. One of them is health issues. To further explain it, individuals may have to face some issues regarding health. Because packaged food are unhealthy we can save time with it but we also have to face issues like abdominal pain, weak gut health and many more. The survey conducted by Times News 2018 states that 70% health issues are caused by frozen food, packed food and the food prepared by the restaurants.

To conclude it, every coin has two faces like this every situation have their own advantages and disadvantages. As we thing we can save time by having packaged food and food from restaurants; however we may can face serious health issues by consuming these kind of food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of relying on convenience food. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding international students is a bit anecdotal and could be better linked to the broader theme of time management. While the position is clear, the supporting points lack depth and rely on generalizations. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, ensure that each point is fully explored with more detailed reasoning or specific examples rather than just stating the point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'In this...' or 'There are...'. The transition between ideas within paragraphs could be smoother; for example, the jump from discussing international students to family bonding feels slightly abrupt. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive to ensure a better flow of information throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are some errors in word choice, such as 'bog example' (likely a typo for 'big') and '50% depended on' (should be 'dependent'). The phrasing is often simplistic, relying on basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and collocations related to nutrition, lifestyle, and time management, while ensuring that spelling and word forms are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include punctuation errors (e.g., comma splices like '...less time, There is...'), subject-verb agreement issues ('packaged food are'), and awkward phrasing ('we may can face'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence boundary control and ensuring correct verb forms will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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