Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The majority of people who use private cars for traveling into one place to another, gives negative effect to the environment and extreme traffic all over the world. In my perspective, people relying on the car cause bad benefits to our present days.

First, in this modern age the number of individuals who use cars increase drastically resulting to have an intense air pollution, and it affects everyone who live in the area, this become the problem of the government especially United state, where citizens prefered to buy a car instead of commuting, In my opinion everyone knows the benefits of having vehicle but we can not overlook the fact that cars are the most contributer of airpollution to environment because of the smoke that cars release.

Moreover, another dissadvantages of using private vehicle is it can cause traffic, In my opinion, nowadays, I noticed that I used to see private suv and van than taxi's and buses maybe because drivers who ownc car are not satissfied by the service of the government where we know they are the one who implement rules and services inside the public transportation. to give some background, one of the common worry of commuters is, almost of the time there are crimes happened such as kidnapping and stealling the belongings of other while commuting. Therefore, individuals buy cars by force for their security purposes a

Finally, if the goverment implement the new and more strict regulations about transportation, such as, providing cctv camera and larger space to seat, it maybe encourage everyone especially those who use cars to commute, so that we will preserve the natural ecosystem that we have,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear overall position that reliance on private cars has negative effects, and you identify relevant impacts: air pollution and traffic. You also offer a reason people choose cars—concerns about crime on public transport—and suggest improving public transport as a response. However, the discussion only partly answers how car reliance affects the way people live: the effects on health, time, costs, or daily routines are not explored, and the final recommendation is not fully connected to the argument. Several claims, such as cars being the main contributor to pollution, need explanation or a specific example. Develop each main effect with a clear cause, consequence, and supporting example to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs on pollution and traffic, and a concluding recommendation. Sequencing words such as “First,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the traffic paragraph shifts from vehicle numbers to dissatisfaction with public transport and then to crime without clearly linking these points. Some sentences are very long and contain several ideas, while the final paragraph ends without a clear concluding statement. Use shorter units to separate claims and explanations, and make the links between private-car use, public-transport concerns, and the effects on daily life explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “private vehicle,” “commuters,” “public transportation,” and “natural ecosystem.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. Examples include “gives negative effect,” “bad benefits,” “most contributer,” and “common worry.” Spelling and word formation also need attention, as in “dissadvantages,” “prefered,” and “stealling.” Aim to learn accurate phrases as complete units, such as “has a negative effect” and “contributes significantly to air pollution,” and proofread spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “where,” and “so that.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “the number of individuals who use cars increase” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “everyone who live in the area” also needs agreement. Several sentences run together, particularly the long sentence beginning “First, in this modern age,” and punctuation does not reliably separate complete ideas. Practise building accurate sentences with one main point at a time, checking subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. Then add subordinate clauses once the basic structure is secure.

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