Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this era, most of individuals depends on their own vehicles to commute from one place to another. Which impact huge change in their lifes as compared to older times. In my opinion, this change overwieght the negavtive side of private cars which i will discuss in further,

To begin with, personal transport saves a time while travelling because person does not have to wait for public transport and not only wait it also more comfortable to commute in own vehlicle. For instance, in public buses their are so many passengers and you may find drug addictives which makes noises which leads to uneasiness. Also, in winters you have to wait for so long to bus arrive and schedule your day according to their route which results in delays for important meatings or work but if you have your car you can go anywhere without any problem.

Moreover, now a days there are so many cases of racism in our country and this concern about individuals safety. In month of july I heard a news on Tv that one person was stabbed in public train because of racism. This also proves that owning a vehicle is life changing decision. In addition, pupil can travel long distance comfortablely in their cars, Rvs instead relay on other transportatiom system provided by government.

In conclusion, people rely on private cars because of their comfortness, less time consuming which results in good life style as comparisoin to other transportation system.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions by describing convenience and safety as effects of car use, and your view that the effects are mainly positive is apparent in the introduction and conclusion. However, the response only partially develops the task: most support concerns personal benefits, while broader effects on how people live and any negative consequences of reliance on cars are largely absent. The example about a stabbing on public transport supports a safety concern, but it does not explain the wider impact of car dependence. The position is also expressed unclearly in “this change overwieght the negavtive side.” The response is four words below the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, state your position clearly and develop a balanced set of effects with specific explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally group related points, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from saving time to crowded buses, winter delays and missed meetings without clearly separating the points. Some links, such as “This also proves,” do not make the relationship between the example and the claim fully clear. Use shorter sentences, make each paragraph’s main point explicit, and connect examples directly to the effect they illustrate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate basic ideas about transport, including “public transport,” “passengers,” “route,” “racism” and “long distance.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “owning a vehicle” and “life changing decision.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices, collocations and spelling errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “comfortness,” “saves a time,” “drug addictives” and “overwieght the negavtive side.” Repetition of “transport” and “car” also limits flexibility. Build a bank of accurate transport-related phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully; choosing familiar, precise wording is more effective than attempting an inaccurate expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because,” “which” and “if,” so there is some variety. However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. The opening fragment, “Which impact huge change,” is not a complete sentence, and “most of individuals depends” has problems with article use and subject–verb agreement. Other examples include “you have to wait for so long to bus arrive” and “pupil can travel long distance,” where sentence structure, articles and number are not controlled. Punctuation also creates run-on sentences. Practise forming complete sentences, checking subject–verb agreement and articles, and dividing long sentences into clear units before adding more complex clauses.

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