Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I think rely on privates cars for transportation can affect the way we live because rely on private car can cause different problem. The big problem well be every can afford private car. You have to pay insurnace, gas and parking tickets. In other way there also a probelm for government to provide parking if we rely on private cars and also the govement will be in loss from the transportation department. It can also affects our way of living because you cannot take your private car every where. There is also a fear that someone stole my car. The private car will cost you more then the government tranpostaion which will increase cost of living. I think rely on private cars in a way have bith posivte and negative effects.

Private cars give you luxury, affordable and no waoting for public transport. whneever you want you have acces for your transport,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant effects of car dependence, including the costs of insurance, fuel and parking, pressure on governments to provide parking, and the convenience of having personal transport. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the effects on daily life are listed rather than explained, and your view on whether they are mainly positive or negative is unclear. The final sentence says there are “both positive and negative effects,” but does not decide which tend to outweigh the other. The positive points—“luxury” and not having to wait for public transport—also need explanation or an example. The response is 98 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop and support the ideas. State a clear overall position and expand each main point with reasons or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to group related points: most of the first paragraph discusses disadvantages, while the final lines introduce benefits. This gives the reader some sense of the response’s direction. However, the ideas do not develop in a clear sequence, and the short final paragraph ends abruptly. Connections between points are often unclear; for example, the claim that the government “will be in loss” is not explained in relation to the cost of providing parking or transport. Linking phrases such as “In other way” and “also” are used, but they do not consistently show the relationship between ideas. Organise the response into a clear introduction, developed paragraphs for the main effects, and a conclusion that restates your position. Use linking expressions to show cause, contrast and consequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “private cars,” “insurance,” “parking,” “transportation” and “cost of living,” so the general subject is usually understandable. There are also attempts to express different effects, such as “luxury” and “fear.” However, the vocabulary is limited and some word choices or forms make meaning difficult to follow: “the government will be in loss” and “government tranpostaion” are unclear, while “every where” and “no waoting” contain spelling errors. Repetition of “private car” and “problem” also limits precision. Build a wider range of accurate transport and cost-related expressions, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe a government as “incurring costs” and refer to “public transport” rather than “government transportation.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple statements and makes some attempts to join ideas with “because” and “if,” as in “because rely on private car can cause different problem.” These attempts show an effort to express reasons, but the sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make the intended meaning harder to understand. Examples include “I think rely on privates cars,” “The big problem well be every can afford private car,” and “It can also affects our way of living.” There are recurring problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. The final line, “whenever you want you have acces for your transport,” also lacks clear grammatical control and punctuation. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and verb forms before adding more complex clauses.

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