Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Its true that many parts of the world ,people rely on private cars for transportation.Because people believe that its comfortable way to go any where without waiting for another transportation.Usually effects tend to be positive to use private vehicle.

on the one hand,People rely on their private cars for personal works and easy to go anywhere and they dont have to wait for another public transport,Such we dont have wait for lot in public transport.Although it can save the money for daily cost of transportation.Howeverpublic transport cannot go anywhere can as we wish to go so it is benefit,also it effect or give profit to automobiles

company's for buying the vehicles and more different companies are manufacturing lot of cars also

for public purpose.So it is a beneficial way to use own car

Now on the second ,there were some drawbacks of using own cars like there are lot of population

in the world so if we use public transportation it is good for us . and there are traffic issues also there lack of parking spaces due to more cars and it also affect the global warming by creating

polution.And some of the people drive very rough in highways and road also this also affect as a cause of accident so using public transportation it is a source of saving money.

In conclusion,there were few of drawback of using private cars for transportation but,not at all its beneficial also for public .The effect tend to positive using private cars it cannot much affect the way we live.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the effects of car reliance and whether these are positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention benefits like convenience and drawbacks like pollution and traffic, these points are not fully extended or supported with specific examples. The position is somewhat inconsistent; you argue that the effects are positive in the introduction and first body paragraph, but then shift to discussing drawbacks without clearly reconciling these opposing views in a balanced way. To improve, ensure each main idea is supported by a clear explanation or a concrete example to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Such we dont have wait' and 'Now on the second' are awkward transitions that do not effectively link ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' 'nevertheless') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'go anywhere' and 'save the money' are used multiple times. There are also issues with word formation and collocation, such as 'personal works' (should be 'personal errands') and 'drive very rough' (should be 'drive recklessly'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and precision in word choice limits the score. Incorporating more topic-specific vocabulary related to transportation and urban planning would significantly enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in highways'), incorrect verb forms, and run-on sentences. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces missing after commas and periods. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to cause some difficulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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