Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.
In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?
Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is often argued that people are prioritizing the use of their personal transport , which negatively affects our standard of living. It creates enormous pollution in the environment and become an expenditure for citizens.
Using the personal car is expensive option than travelling on a public transport. People are using their own vehicle for daily use, which become a fixed expense for their monthly budget. If the usage of car is more, fuel consumption would be more. Everyone need a personal vehicle even their destination is ten minutes away. For example, people are buying additional vehcles for their family members such as, two wheeler is for travelling college, another vehicle used for household work. Therefore, unecessary expenses add-ons in their monthly budget, which make it difficult save for their future uncertainties.
Moreover, air pollution is another detrimental factor for our health. By increasing traffic on roads, effecting environment, and it also creates many health issues such as asthma, heart diseases, and breathing issues. Deforestisation is common in metropolitan, carbon monoxide coming out of thier combustion may initiates severe health issues.
It is a negative trend because
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, ending abruptly mid-sentence. Because the essay is significantly under-length and incomplete, it cannot fully address all parts of the task. While the student identifies some negative effects such as pollution and financial strain, the lack of a conclusion and the incomplete nature of the argument prevent a full development of ideas. To improve, you must ensure you complete the essay structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, while providing sufficient detail to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, with paragraphs focusing on financial and environmental impacts. However, the abrupt ending severely disrupts the overall coherence. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'Therefore', but their effectiveness is limited by the incomplete nature of the text. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that the essay flows logically to a finished conclusion, using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, though it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'unnecessary expenses add-ons' and 'Deforestisation' (misspelling of deforestation). Phrases like 'enormous pollution' and 'detrimental factor' are used correctly, but the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Using the personal car is expensive option than travelling' (missing articles and incorrect comparative structure) and 'carbon monoxide coming out of thier combustion may initiates' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically article usage, subject-verb agreement, and the correct formation of comparative adjectives.
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