Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern era, in many countries people use private cars to commute. It has various affects on our lives as well as on environment. It has both positive and negative effects on our lives.

In some countries, where public transportation is not fully developed cars and private vahicls are main mode of transportation. Countries like India where the population is to high and public transportation is often too crowded. Buying a private car can be a vise decision. Trains of major cities like Mumbai and Delhi are often delay. As result a person who is going for an important work can be late. Whereas the person who own a vehicl is on a upper hand in this situation. Having private vehical give people more freedom and opportunities. For example, when someone is in emergency situation they can drive there there car to the hospital.

Furthermore, owning a private car does not always solve the problems.

It has its own downsides. Such as being stuck in traffic. It is very frustrating if you stuck in traffic for hours. Moreover, public transportation is safer and affordable to commute as compare to private cars. If someone owns a car he or she has to pay insurance for the car as well as gas money and maintenance. Furthermore, if everybody buy their own car instead of using public transport they gonna make carbon emission, which is one of the main reason of air pollution. Which is bad for our health and our planet.

In conclusion, having a private car to commute has both positive and negative impact on our lives. We should find a way to keep the balance of pros and cons of having private cars.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the ways in which reliance on private cars affects our lives and whether these effects are positive or negative. The ideas are relevant, such as the convenience of private transport in crowded cities versus the environmental and financial drawbacks. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding 'freedom' is supported by a brief example, but the discussion on environmental impact is quite general. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations or specific consequences. The position is clear throughout, though the conclusion could be more decisive regarding your final stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic progression of ideas from the benefits of car ownership to the drawbacks. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'For example', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the flow feel slightly disjointed at times. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. You rely on common words like 'good', 'bad', and 'problems'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'affects' (used as a noun instead of 'effects'), 'vahicls', 'vise', 'vehicl', and 'vehical'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, you should focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic (e.g., 'urban mobility', 'environmental degradation', 'financial burden') and ensure accurate spelling of common terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('everybody buy their own car'), article usage ('on a upper hand'), and sentence fragments ('Which is bad for our health'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of periods and commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips will help improve your accuracy.

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