Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern era many individuals life becomes busy for that it is important for them to save up time that is the reason some of them are rely on private mode of transportation such as cars However, this tends has both the sides positive and negative both effects this essay will discuss both the sides.

First of all , to have our own car brings lots of benefits like if we have our own car then we can go whenever we want to go on the top of that it also save up time we become more independent rather than rely on public transport let me be clear with the example, when i was a student i used to travel by public transport i had to leave early from my house to catch the bus but when my father used to drop me by car we did not had to leave from the house early and that saves up my energy and time both which was advantageous for me ,Car is also useful for moving the house items as well as long distance travel feels convenient for us because of flexibility and spaciousness in the car.

On the other side , I would like to discuss some of the difficulties which may we can face with our own car having car is not only advantageous for but it also have some major expenses such as car maintenance , gas expenses for maintain that we need to have more money as well as big things comes with prices to have our own car for individuals they need to make money and work hard to achieve their desires in life.

In the end , I would like to say that having car is a basic necessity of every individuals however, it may leads to huge problems if we can not pay the maintenance on time for the car and for that we have to work double shifts as big dreams comes with huge sacrifices in this case individuals have to sacrifice their sleep and comfort zone to make their life more reliable than vehicles

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt by discussing the effects of private car reliance and providing your perspective on whether these effects are positive or negative. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide a personal example regarding commuting, the discussion on the negative aspects—specifically the financial burden—is a bit repetitive and lacks depth. To improve, ensure that each point is fully explored with more sophisticated reasoning. Your position is clear, but the conclusion is slightly disjointed from the main body, as it introduces the idea of 'sacrificing sleep' which was not previously established in the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'on the top of that' and 'let me be clear with the example' are used in a way that feels unnatural. Additionally, there is a lack of sophisticated transition between sentences, making the flow feel somewhat choppy. The punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement, which occasionally disrupts the logical progression of your ideas. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help your writing flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your main points clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'transportation', 'maintenance', and 'flexibility'. However, the range is limited, and there are instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'this tends has both the sides' and 'big things comes with prices'. These errors do not prevent understanding, but they do limit the precision of your expression. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but the essay contains frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('this tends has', 'big things comes'), missing articles, and run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation. For instance, the first paragraph is essentially one long, unpunctuated sentence. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence boundaries and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree consistently throughout your work.

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