Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In numerous regions of the planet, many individuals are depending on their personal four wheelers for travelling. In my perspective, this trend has a detrimental effect on the world as the number of vehicles are increasing. which is a major reason for increased traffic and pollution.

Every person deserves to have a convenient commute to achieve this they are purchasing their own cars. Due to which they can travel any where they like at any instance so, the rise in air pollution is also contributed by toxic gases released by vehicles now-a-days. For example, I was travelling to work by public transport daily spending 4 hours of my day as I live in Mississauga and had to commute to Burlington which is 50 kilometers away from my home. After a while I decided to buy a car for myself despite having three other cars at home these are used by my other family members. To sum up families are choosing to provide easy travel to their loved ones by buying them cars.

As the cars are increasing on roads another problem is faced by general populace which is traffic. if you go any where you will find many vehicles stuck on traffic signals for instance, my daily commute takes a hour by car event though it is just 50 kms. Despite knowing the having own car is contributing in air pollution and traffic still i have to choose it over public transport.

In conclusion, many developing countries are promoting to public to have their own vehicles which is not a good idea as it is leading to increased traffic and air pollution

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the effects of car reliance and whether these are positive or negative. You clearly state your position that the trend is detrimental. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide personal anecdotes, such as your commute in Mississauga, the analysis remains quite superficial. To improve, you should expand on the broader societal or environmental implications beyond your personal experience. For instance, discussing the impact on urban planning or long-term climate change would provide a more comprehensive response. The conclusion is a bit abrupt and could better summarize the main arguments presented in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Due to which' is used incorrectly at the start of a sentence, and 'event though' is a spelling error that disrupts the flow. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, particularly in the second paragraph where you jump from the convenience of cars to the issue of toxic gases. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'nevertheless') would help improve the logical progression between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'four wheelers', 'any where they like', and 'general populace'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'promoting to public'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to transportation and environmental issues, such as 'urban congestion', 'carbon emissions', 'infrastructure', or 'sustainable alternatives'. Spelling errors like 'any where' (anywhere) and 'event though' (even though) also detract from the overall quality of the lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('number of vehicles are increasing'), punctuation errors (missing commas, incorrect sentence fragments like 'which is a major reason...'), and misuse of prepositions. For example, 'Despite knowing the having own car' is grammatically incorrect. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence boundary control and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately will be key to improvement.

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