Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many parts of the world, people depend on private vehicles like personal cars and taxi rides like Uber, Ola, Lyft, and many more. So at some point, it is good for people to depend on the ride of a taxi.

A group of people can go to their work by choosing a car, so that they can save fuel and also can save their money. Although, some people choose to drive by their own vehicle, because of their privacy and some lavish luxury lifestyle.

By doing this, a group of people can save fuel for our future generation and can also save environmental products like methane gas and petroleum items such as petrol and diesel. Therefore, it is creating a positive impact on all the members of the world. There are some negative effects also connected with this; for example, people will suffer in a non-AC car in the summer season, like suffocation. Also, they are commuting by bus and train. So it will be a time-taking ride for them. And also they will not reach their job location on time because of heavy traffic. So they need to wake up early to reach the job location on time.

In my opinion, if people rely on private cars for transportation, it is a good way to save many environmental products, and also it gives people time to communicate with each other. By depending on private cars for commuting, people can save their time and money as well. And I think it's a good way to save money, time and energy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but lacks depth and clarity. While you identify both positive and negative effects, the arguments are often contradictory or confusing. For instance, you suggest that private cars save fuel and protect the environment, which is generally considered factually incorrect in the context of transport studies. Furthermore, the argument about 'suffocation' in non-AC cars and the mention of buses/trains seem disconnected from the topic of 'private car reliance'. To improve, ensure your ideas are logically consistent and directly support your position. The conclusion is repetitive and does not effectively synthesize the points made.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. Transitions are often mechanical or misused, such as 'Although, some people choose...' at the start of a sentence, which is grammatically incorrect. The logical flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by unclear references or abrupt shifts in topic. For example, the transition from discussing private cars to the difficulties of public transport is jarring and lacks a clear cohesive link. More varied and accurate cohesive devices are needed to guide the reader through your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good way', 'save', and 'people'. There are also instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'environmental products' and 'methane gas and petroleum items', which do not accurately reflect the environmental impact of vehicles. Some phrases, like 'ride of a taxi', are unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to transportation, urban planning, and environmental issues, and avoid repeating the same words in close proximity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect article usage, subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'some people choose to drive by their own vehicle'), and awkward phrasing. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure often feels disjointed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that complex structures are used accurately rather than just attempted.

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