Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.
In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?
Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
People often rely on private cars for the transportation than the public transportation around the world. This essay will discuss the positive and negative side of the issue.
Most number of the people will use their own vehicle to go anywhere for many number of reasons. For example, one can go whenever they choose to, where as travelling in public transport involves waiting for bus for a longer time and there might be delays and cancellations. It will allow to save time by using private cars.
Positive side of using private vehicles are it saves individual time by reducing the waiting time to go anywhere, it helps in being accessible to any emergency situations. For Instance, if someone in the house is not feeling well, they can easily submit them in hospital without relaying on anything. Private vehicle helps to go to the places where there is no public transportation access.
Drawbacks of the reliance on private cars are increase of cars on the streets which involve in pollution to the environment like honking will be more and it causes noise pollution, it also affects our nature by emission of gases. It will make people lazy like people avoid to walk short distance , will use their very own vehicle. This might affect one's physical fitness. As the number of private vehicles increases the demand of gas will also increase.
In conclusion, people shouldn't relay completely on the private cars which makes them lazy. It is better to use according to the requirement of individual.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The essay addresses all parts of the prompt, identifying both positive and negative effects of private car reliance. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the point about 'emergency situations' is a good start but lacks depth. The argument regarding physical fitness is relevant but could be expanded with more specific consequences. The position is clear, but the overall response would benefit from more detailed supporting evidence and a more nuanced exploration of the 'positive vs. negative' balance to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'Positive side of...', 'Drawbacks of...'). There are also issues with referencing and flow; for instance, the transition between the benefits of private transport and the environmental drawbacks is abrupt. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the writing feel somewhat disjointed in places.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'submit them in hospital' instead of 'take them to the hospital' and 'relay' used instead of 'rely'. The range is limited, relying on basic descriptors like 'positive side' and 'drawbacks'. To improve, you should focus on using more precise collocations and academic vocabulary related to transportation and environmental impact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Most number of the people' (incorrect quantifier usage), 'where as' (should be 'whereas'), and 'it helps in being accessible to any emergency situations' (awkward phrasing). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.
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