Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this cutting edge era, private transportation has been immerging rapidly day-by-day. In some of the countries, individuals mostly prefer to using their own vehicle for transportation instead of public transport facilities. However, it affects to the generation in many ways and according to that, they would have many pros and cons, which are explained in details below.

First and foremost consequence is pollution because we know as much as vehicle people use as it affects nature as well as human's health by creating more more pollution in area. Secondly, reliance on personal cars makes people lazy, because those who are using private cars for transportation not getting enough time for walk and not doing an exercise to get a rid of such problems regarding to the health. Lastly, using private cars make expensive as compare to use of public transport because every individual have has to fill fuel or pay insurance and or paying extra service fees every month to take care of their vehicle, which makes people's life expensive or debtor.

On the other hand, private vehicle helps a lot to the people, which is time saving, because public transportation takes too much time to reach to the destination of individual and also everyone have to pretend based on public transport schedule, while private car takes you to the destination in very short time period. Along with that, it helps to make an extra income. For an instance, nowadays, private owner of car makes extra income by doing uber drive as well as food facilities, which helps a lot to individual to generate an extra income in spare time.

To be conclude with relying on private cars for transportation saving an extra time of individuals to do some extra work or activities. Although, it affects nature by creating pollution in society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, identifying both the effects of car reliance and providing a balanced view on whether these effects are positive or negative. The ideas are relevant, such as pollution, health impacts, and time efficiency. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the point about 'extra income' via Uber is a bit narrow and could have been expanded to discuss broader economic impacts. The position is clear, but the conclusion is brief and lacks a strong summary of the main arguments. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more detailed explanations or specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First and foremost', 'Secondly', and 'On the other hand', though some are used mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'To be conclude with'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'according to that, they would have many pros and cons', where the pronoun 'they' does not clearly refer to a specific noun. The logical flow is generally maintained, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall readability of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'immerging rapidly' (emerging), 'get a rid of' (get rid of), and 'debtor' (in debt). The student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'public transport facilities' and 'insurance', but the overall range is limited. To improve, the student should focus on learning collocations and more sophisticated synonyms to avoid repetitive or inaccurate word choices. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the misuse of basic vocabulary items hinders the expression of more complex ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('everyone have has to', 'individual have'), article usage ('the pollution in area'), and prepositional errors ('affects to the generation', 'compare to use of'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. The student needs to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading to eliminate these persistent errors. A greater variety of complex structures, used with more accuracy, would be required for a higher band score.

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