Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

reliances on private car has reshaped in every modern era. to how the cities are builts to how people utilize their time like walking,running or cycling. i will discuss both impact negative and positive who people applied this modern trend in their life

think positive about privates car are flexible to go anywhere anytime without booking any tickets or going on some terminal or wait for the local transport moreover its also less stressful for moving things like heavy equipment, grocery's or children in the city or out of the city especially in rural areas where local transport in imparatical. cars are also provides economical support like people live in side areas where renting house are low they easily communicate to the office or their business which is locate in the center of the city through private cars .

the trouble is that many of the benefits are individual when the cost are collective.if you are not earn good in your life their are many liabilites to have a private cars moreover one person converice of driving contributes to congestion, pollution and infrasater cost that everyone bears .cities are heavily invested in car infrastructure find it very difficulties to reverse course winding the road to avoid the traffic jam by contract that invested in public transits and cycling infrastructure and walkable designs tend to report of healthy air,public health and happiness surveys ,

In conclusion, the privates cars negative impact are move outweigh then positive . cars give you comforts save your time to move everywhere but cars are give us pollution health issue and stressful traffic jam, i think government send more fund or local transport for local and city to city and also give attention to rurals area where the local transport are available

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: how reliance on cars affects life and whether these effects are positive or negative. The student clearly takes a position in the conclusion that the negative impacts outweigh the positive. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the benefits (flexibility, convenience) and drawbacks (pollution, congestion) are identified, the explanation lacks depth and specific examples. The argument is clear, but the analysis remains at a surface level, which prevents it from reaching a higher band. To improve, the student should provide more detailed illustrations or logical consequences for the points raised.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, phrases like 'by contract that' are used incorrectly to transition between ideas, and the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the transition between the benefits of cars and the collective costs. While the overall progression is discernible, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional misuse of cohesive devices limit the score. Improving the variety and precision of transition signals would significantly enhance the readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are frequent errors in word formation and spelling, such as 'imparatical' (impractical), 'converice' (convenience), and 'infrasater' (infrastructure). Some collocations are unnatural, such as 'people live in side areas' (likely meaning 'outskirts' or 'suburbs'). While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'congestion' and 'infrastructure', the persistent spelling and word-choice errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. A wider range of vocabulary and more attention to correct word forms are needed to move to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical errors are frequent and pervasive. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('cars are also provides', 'privates cars are flexible'), article usage, and punctuation. Sentence boundaries are often blurred, and the misuse of prepositions and verb tenses is common. While the meaning is generally clear despite these errors, the high frequency of mistakes prevents the essay from demonstrating the control required for a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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