Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Transport has become an essential part of life. Many people use different modes of transport for travelling. But a majority of people in the world rely on private cars as a means of tranportation. This essay intends to discuss that, whether the private cars have positive or negative afftects on the lives. Let us ponder on it.

To commence with, the private cars have brought the security and safety. While, with the rapid rate in crimes, where it seems impossible to step out of the house. Private cars makes it possible for every individual especially for females and has become a reliable source of travelling. Furthermore, it is quite time saving. People do not have to wait for longer hours to get the delayed bus and train services. Everybody owns cars can reach at their destinations without being late. Moreover, private cars are more comfortable and peaceful than any other vehicle. People who cannot adjust with others, feel uncomfortable and awkward in crowded vehicles as well as want more privacy, private cars are best option for them.

However, some people believe it has also some negative affects on the lives. Firstly, private cars have made more congestion and traffice in the cities. There are always traffice jams on the roads. People have to wait for longer times in the jams which led to delays, frusturation and temper. Eventually, eagerness to reach on the time leads to fatal road accidents. For instance, as per a recent news roughly one lakh individuals died in road accidents every year. Apart from that, it has certainly affected the environment as well. There is noticeably more pollution than ever seen before. Cities are filled with smoke and people are facing several health issues related to respiratory, skin allergies and eyes infections.

To sum up, although private cars have a few cons like pollution and traffice congestions. So, both people and government should find ways to tackle the certain issues to bring more positivity in the world. But the benifits like, they are time saving, comfortable and reliable source should not be overseen insted, constantly find the ways to improve it by widening roads and regulating traffice police.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the positive and negative ways reliance on private cars affects our lives. The writer presents a clear position throughout the essay. Ideas are extended and supported, such as mentioning security, time-saving benefits, and the downsides of traffic congestion and pollution. For instance, the student notes that 'private cars are more comfortable and peaceful' and points out environmental impacts like respiratory and skin issues. However, there is a tendency to over-generalize in places, and some points could be more deeply developed to reach a higher band. Overall, the prompt requirements are fully met with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a clear overall organization with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing both sides, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', 'However', and 'To sum up'. However, some of the cohesive links feel mechanical or awkward, such as 'Let us ponder on it' and the phrasing in the conclusion which suffers from run-on structure and punctuation issues ('So, both people and government...'). Referencing is mostly clear, but the logical progression within the conclusion is slightly disrupted by grammatical errors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items like 'transportation', 'congestion', and 'respiratory'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'tranportation', 'afftects', 'frusturation', 'insted', and 'benifits'. Collocations are sometimes slightly unnatural, for example, 'brought the security and safety' or 'made more congestion'. While these errors do not seriously impede communication, they reflect a Band 6 level where vocabulary control shows frequent minor inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety in structure. Examples include conditional and relative clauses like 'People who cannot adjust with others, feel uncomfortable...' and 'While, with the rapid rate in crimes, where it seems impossible...'. However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, particularly missing articles ('reach at their destinations'), incorrect prepositions, and awkward sentence fragments ('While, with the rapid rate...'). Although these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they persist throughout the response and prevent it from reaching a higher band score.

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