Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.
In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?
Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the modern era, in the whole the world, everyone depends on their private vehicle like cars for going here and there and it is reliance on private cars effect our life. However, there are some reason of this phenomenon and this trend have both positive and negative impacts and the ideas will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, there are few factors of this notion. The first and the foremost issue is that, a most of people prefer own cars, because sometimes they are going to anywhere with their all family members and people want to travel without any difficulty such as reach at the exact time on place, high cab fairs and comfort with their own car.
Nevertheless, there are both adverse and fruitful impacts of this statement. Firstly, it is good, so people always want to travel with their own, because they can choose their comfort and it Also, show their class to other persons and neighbors. Apart from this, people love to punctuality and travel by own car, people have to own choice related to their trip and it short breaks between travel. However, On the other hand, own cars is bad for all, when people get their own cars, then people always prefer to travel by car, when they can travel for short distance as well as they can use the cars, when they become peer-pressure and it is bad for fossil fuels like petroleum.
In conclusion, although there are some reason and impacts of this trend, due to aforementioned paragraphs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing the ways reliance on private cars affects our lives and considering whether these effects are positive or negative. The student attempts to outline reasons for car dependency and explores both fruitful and adverse impacts, such as comfort, status, and environmental consequences. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, and the position is not consistently clear throughout due to imprecise expression. Phrases like 'when people get their own cars, then people always prefer to travel by car' lack deeper extension and concrete supporting examples from personal experience. Consequently, the response sits comfortably within Band 5, as the ideas remain somewhat under-developed and general.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text demonstrates some organisation with standard signposting phrases such as 'To commence with', 'Nevertheless', and 'In conclusion'. However, there is no clear overall logical progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the third paragraph is a massive block that clumsily attempts to merge multiple contrasting ideas ('Firstly, it is good...' transitioning immediately into 'However, On the other hand...'). Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, and cohesive devices are often inaccurate, repetitive, or poorly managed. For instance, sentences are joined in a run-on fashion using commas and coordinating conjunctions rather than precise logical links. Therefore, the overall organisational structure reflects the characteristics of Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited, repetitive range of vocabulary that is only minimally adequate for the task. Words and phrases such as 'going here and there', 'good', 'bad', and 'own cars' are recycled excessively. There are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate collocations throughout the text, such as 'high cab fairs' (fares), 'love to punctuality', and 'peer-pressure' used in an incorrect context regarding transport choices. While these lexical slips do not completely obscure the central meaning, they frequently cause strain for the reader and prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. The majority of sentences are simple or awkwardly structured attempts at complex sentences that frequently fail grammatically, such as 'when they can travel for short distance as well as they can use the cars, when they become peer-pressure'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions, and tense usage (e.g., 'this trend have both positive', 'reach at the exact time on place'). These recurring errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and clearly align with the descriptors for Band 4.5 to 5.0, warranting a score of 5.0.
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