Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.
In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?
Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Dear sir/madam
This essay will discuss the reason, many people are rely on private cars for transport, private cars are effect many ways in live.
To begin the first view is nowadays the trend is everyone buy a private car for him, everybody buy for her private car is very negative point for city and people, first point is traffic, many cars run in streets full of trafic and polution, and block the streets and roads or everyone buy a car they effect on public transport and there jobs
furthermore another positive point is everyone got a car, they dont need to waiting for any person to go anywhere and they go anywhere any wating for public transport, they go in his private car for work, family functions, important work
conclusion is that everyone buy a private cars many positive or negative points, many people are think that they buy a private car for him he eassily reach on time for important work, and many people are think is everyone buy a private cars he blocks streets or there will be more polution and effect on public transport
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student addresses parts of the prompt by discussing reasons for relying on private cars and mentioning both positive and negative effects on daily life, such as convenience versus traffic and pollution. However, the response falls significantly short of the required 250-word minimum, containing only 188 words. Consequently, the ideas remain underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting examples or extension. The position is also somewhat disjointed, shifting between informal salutations like 'Dear sir/madam' and basic essay elements. Because the task response is incomplete in length and development, it corresponds to a Band 4.5 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text attempts a standard essay structure with an introduction, body points, and a conclusion. However, the organization is hindered by a lack of proper paragraphing and mechanical cohesive devices. Sentences are often run-on or poorly connected, as seen in phrases like 'To begin the first view is nowadays the trend...'. Paragraph boundaries are blurred, and transitional phrases are either missing or misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow a clear logical progression of ideas. Referencing pronouns like 'he' and 'she' are also confusingly applied to inanimate concepts or general people. This performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very basic and repetitive vocabulary range, relying heavily on simple words such as 'car', 'people', 'work', and 'positive'. There are noticeable limitations and inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'many cars run in streets full of trafic and polution' and 'everyone got a car'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'trafic', 'polution', 'eassily', and 'dont'. The lexical resource is minimally adequate for conveying very basic meaning, but frequent inaccuracies and repetition place it at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are overwhelmingly simple or poorly formed complex sentences. The text suffers from heavy punctuation errors, particularly run-on sentences joined entirely by commas instead of full stops or proper conjunctions, such as in the opening and conclusion paragraphs. Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are frequently violated, as seen in 'many people are rely' and 'everyone buy'. Due to the lack of error-free sentences and the high frequency of basic grammatical flaws that disrupt communication, the grammar score is Band 4.0.
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