Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people rely on private cars for transportation.

In what ways does reliance on private cars affect the way we live?

Do the effects tend to be positive or negative?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Use of own vehicals now a days increase in individuals. Having your own car have an effect on your living standard. From my perspective, having your own vahicals have both positive and negative effect according to different situations.

To commence with, In positive term when you have your own car its easy for you to move one place to another. Moreover, in emergency there is no issue of transportation. Sometimes you want to travel out of city and its makes your route better. For instance, In my society one family member was going through the last stage of cancer. Suddenly his health became worse but he died because late arrival of ambulance. If they have their own car, the surviving chance might be increased. Thus , having your own transport can beneficial for you.

On the other hand, its also have negative effect on society. A rush on roads of transport creat environmentel pollution. which leads various diseases. Moreover, rush of traffic can cause of late arrival. Accident also accur due to conjestion of transport. For example, IN uk mostly people use public transport. There are no traffic rush. The environment is clear thus, many people around the world wanted to live their lives in these peaceful country.

In conclusion, having you own car is beneficial but having it by all the individuals creat many problems. Now a days having own vehical cause to leading a luxury life. We should avoid exccessive use of own vehicals. we use public transport when we are relaxed enough to travel by this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you describe practical benefits, such as easier travel and responding to emergencies, and drawbacks including pollution, congestion and accidents. Your conclusion also gives a clear overall view that private cars are useful but widespread use creates problems. The cancer-related example supports the emergency point, although the claim that a car might have improved the outcome is speculative and could be expressed more carefully. Some ideas are less fully developed: for example, the pollution point mentions disease but does not explain the link, and the UK comparison is broad and not clearly connected to private-car reliance. Develop these points with specific explanations and examples to make your response more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the shift in argument. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “Sometimes you want to travel out of city” introduces another benefit without explaining how it relates to the previous point, while “The environment is clear thus” does not make the comparison with the UK fully logical. Referencing is also occasionally confusing, particularly in the example about the family member and ambulance. Use linking phrases more selectively, and make the relationship between each example and the main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “emergency,” “environmental pollution,” “traffic” and “public transport.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “last stage of cancer.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “vehicals,” “conjestion,” “exccessive,” and “rush on roads of transport” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “in positive term” and “luxury life.” Aim to learn accurate collocations for transport and its effects, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the consequences of car use without relying on repeated general terms such as “effect” and “problem.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional in “If they have their own car, the surviving chance might be increased” and a contrast between benefits and drawbacks. Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “Having your own car have an effect” should use a singular verb, and “its also have negative effect” has problems with both the subject and article. Some sentence boundaries are also faulty, as in “A rush on roads of transport creat environmentel pollution. which leads various diseases.” Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and use punctuation to connect clauses accurately.

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