Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

There are opinions that because cell phone usage during driving is dangerous, driver’s cell usage should be made illegal. I believe that there are other less restrictive ways to go about fixing this issue.

Laws by themselves are difficult to construct, especially if one looks to illegalize a notion as broad as banning phones for drivers. For instance, how should a government go about reasonably establishing which cell phone use could be allowed; especially for commercial services (taxis, etc) and essential workers (emergency responders). To personal users, even, the banning of cell phones is an inconvenience at best and burdening at worst, particularly more so in the booming age of communication. If one aims to disenfranchise such a wide necessity of daily life, it must be of more fallacy than interest, and yet, banning cell phones completely for drivers will fail that requirement.

On the other side of this debate, one can argue that eradication is the most straightforward way to solve an issue. The rotting limb is cut off, as is in any medical condition, and it is perceptibly applicable to real life’s societal issues. However, a problem with this proposal has been addressed above: how do you go about cutting off a limb still functional? A successful law must be flexible, serving the interest of many rather than a restrictive stopgap which fails to take into consideration the various aspects regarding said situation.

In conclusion, I do not agree with the proposal to ban cell phone uses for drivers on grounds of what I consider not probable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed the prompt by taking a clear position against a total ban, suggesting that more nuanced solutions are required. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat abstract. While you mention commercial services and emergency responders as examples, the argument remains largely theoretical. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete examples of the 'less restrictive ways' you propose, such as hands-free technology or educational campaigns. The conclusion is a bit abrupt and does not fully summarize your main points, which limits the overall impact of your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

Your essay follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'For instance,' 'On the other side,' and 'However,' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the medical metaphor in the third paragraph and the conclusion is a bit disjointed. The referencing is generally clear, but the logical progression could be strengthened by ensuring each paragraph builds more directly upon the previous one to create a more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using terms like 'disenfranchise,' 'fallacy,' and 'stopgap' effectively. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'illegalize a notion' (which is slightly unnatural; 'criminalize an action' would be better) and 'it must be of more fallacy than interest' (which is unclear). Despite these minor inaccuracies, your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your ideas clearly and demonstrates an attempt to use more sophisticated language, which is a positive feature of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this level. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'There are opinions that' (which should be 'There is an opinion that' or 'It is argued that') and 'cell phone uses' (which should be 'cell phone use'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'to personal users, even,' which affects the flow. However, these errors do not impede communication, and you show a good grasp of punctuation and sentence construction throughout the essay.

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