Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is an undeniable fact that in this era, technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds in each and every field. Nowadays, using a mobile phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, mobile phone use by drivers should be made illegal. In this piece of writing I will shed light on it, I am fully disagree in this paragraphs.
To commence with the abundant reasons that's why, I am fully disagree. First of all, in this era population is very increasing every field and the means of transportation have also increased everywhere. So that all roads is very busy and every human being is very busy life, they are all the time go to the job and other side very fast. They have no time to listen with other talk. all side human being life is very busy.
Accident problem. However, all side road is very busy, like, highway, all city road and all small village road is very busy. When the driver drive the vehicle they drive very fast and some people when they drive the vehicle this time attend the so many calls and some are watch the reals and some listen the songs and movie. When they are not to concentrate to drive after they accident the other vehicle, so that this the very big problem create every person. some person are not follow the rules and drive the vehicle very fast. For instance, in this era, all state the government making the road new. All highway road is new and all city road is new. but still accident problem not close because all people phone using too much, that's why this phone using is very big problem.
To conclude, although there are many benefits to using phone yet can never be overlooked demarit point.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to maintain a clear or consistent position. While you state you 'fully disagree' in the introduction, the body paragraphs do not provide a coherent argument to support this stance; instead, they describe the dangers of phone use while driving, which actually supports the opposing view. The ideas are underdeveloped and lack logical support for your stated position. To improve, ensure your arguments directly support your thesis and provide clear, relevant examples that explain why you hold your opinion. Currently, the response lacks the necessary focus to fully address the prompt's requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas. Paragraphing is present but ineffective, as the content within the paragraphs is disjointed and repetitive. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition 'Accident problem.' at the start of the second body paragraph. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. To improve, use linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') to connect sentences and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed main idea that flows naturally from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic phrasing such as 'very busy' and 'very fast'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'listen with other talk' and 'demarit point'. Some terms are used in ways that do not fit the context, which occasionally impedes communication. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common words and phrases, and focus on using them accurately in the correct context. Practice learning collocations (words that naturally go together) rather than individual words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning difficult to follow. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'all roads is very busy'), sentence structure, and article usage. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in complex attempts. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which affects the clarity of your writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading your work to correct common errors in tense and word order.
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