Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I am completely agree that the use of cell phones should be prohibited while driving. It is most dangerous thing for our lives. Obviously when driver uses phone for instance i watched most time individuals attending pivotal calls while driving or texting to all the pending messages. Honestly it is huge risk for humans life.

Once i was going with my mum from lahore to karachi. It’s a road trip ajd i am driving the car. I saw a group of friends car which is next to my car. They are listening to the load music and suddenly a driver picked a call and the car coming the front they both collapsed. So it is dangerous for people’s life to the extent of life threatening. The rate of excidents are increasing day by day which should overcomr and it can only be done shen the use of mobike phones should be banned.

I know my people in our country like to break rules but it is a responsibility of government too. If they add a rule so they take fines so may be one day they will overcome this issue which should be solved to safe lives. I agree that it is not only the responsibility of parties but also every person should do this on their behave.

Few days earlier, one of my friend going to abbotabad with her husband and another car hit them badly because he is using his phone. So completely agree with the statement phones should not be used when a person is driving even driving car,truck, buss, motercycles of another vehiclez. It is challenging however i hope this issue will be solved one day.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position in favor of banning cell phone use while driving. The ideas are relevant, and personal anecdotes are used to support the argument. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the discussion on government responsibility and fines is brief and lacks depth. While the position is consistent throughout, the response would benefit from more formal analysis of the societal impact or the practical challenges of enforcement to reach a higher band. The task is addressed, but the support remains largely anecdotal rather than analytical.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical or disjointed. For example, the transition between the anecdote about the road trip and the general statement about accidents is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or misused (e.g., 'Once i was going', 'Few days earlier'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subjects of the sentences. Improved use of linking words and better paragraph structure would enhance the logical progression of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. There is a reliance on simple, repetitive language (e.g., 'dangerous', 'life', 'issue'). Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'collapsed' to describe a car accident or 'on their behave' instead of 'on their own behalf'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'ajd', 'excidents', 'overcomr', 'mobike', 'buss', 'motercycles') limit the score. A wider range of topic-specific vocabulary is needed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'They are listening... and suddenly a driver picked'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'one of my friend going'), and punctuation errors. The misuse of articles and prepositions is also common. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader and indicate a lack of control over complex structures. More attention to basic sentence construction and proofreading for grammatical accuracy is essential.

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