Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Using mobile phone while driving can be extremely dangerous as it divert drivers' attention from the road. Therefore, i believe that cell phone uses while driving should be prohibited by laws.

The main reason why mobile phone uses are not allowing drivers while driving is that it divides drivers mind from the road. For example, if drivers paying more attention to reply messages, calls, and scrolling videos on apps while driving there are more chances they may miss traffic lights, cyclists, and pedestrian. As a result, it leads to road accidents.

Furthermore, it also increases traffic jams on the road. Driving vehicles on road in responsible way can cause of injuries, putting others life in risk. Drivers who using cell phone can not control the vehicle suddenly if he is not driving carefully this increases the collision on road. Consequently, leading to even death and financial losses.

Another reason is that it is a serious cause of increasing the rate of insurance. Driving careless leads road accidents, injuries or even death, frequently increases lead to pay high amount of insurance just because of careless drivers. It also can damaged the public properties.

To conclude, although using mobile phone while driving should be made illegal, in an emergency and if driver wants to check maps they can stop the vehicle and use cell phone. In addition, Government should impose fine if someon

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of the arguments. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat under-developed; for instance, the point about insurance rates is introduced but not fully explained in relation to the main argument. The conclusion is incomplete, as the final sentence cuts off abruptly. To improve, you should expand on your supporting points with more detailed examples and ensure the essay meets the minimum word count to allow for a full exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', and 'To conclude' to link your points. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the abrupt ending of the essay negatively impacts the overall coherence of the final paragraph. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, fully developed topic sentence that connects smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. There are several instances of incorrect word forms and collocations, such as 'mobile phone uses are not allowing drivers' instead of 'mobile phone use should not be permitted'. Phrases like 'divides drivers mind' and 'increases the collision' are unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to word choice and collocations. Expanding your range of synonyms for common words like 'dangerous' or 'illegal' would also help demonstrate a higher level of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently struggle with subject-verb agreement and article usage, for example, 'Drivers who using cell phone' should be 'Drivers who use cell phones'. There are also issues with pluralisation and verb forms, such as 'it divert' instead of 'it diverts'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and the correct use of relative clauses, before attempting more complex structures.

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