Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days excess use of mobile phone is become a fashion. A large number of individuals using phone during driving is risking thing ever. It should be forbidden. If some drivers don't follow the traffic rules it would be dangerous for them.

On the one hand, first of all we argue that regarding excess using the phone, mobile phone is an essential thing in our contemporary society. I firmly believe that without phone a lot of things can't work properly. Therefore, a lot of using phone is now depends on work. In our modern society a large number of companies run with the help of these technologies like cell phone, GPS, and internet. There is a considerable amount of business like uber drive take a lot of advantage from the cell phone. However, there are some positive aspects about it they can see their rides on phone also they can use Google map while tracking the rout. Furthermore, a larger number of teenagers dose the same things during driving using phone is not good for their life.

On the other hand, there are numerous negative factors while driving using the phone. Firstly, it can cause increase the accident ratio. also, they cannot obey the traffic rules. So, their citizen record also effected. Secondly, authorities should have to make some hard laws regarding using phone during driving. Government need to make some more rules, and citizen should have to follow them.

In the conclusion, everyone follows the rules and also save the life. it will protect their Vehicles. However, public need to stop using cell phone while driving.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the dangers of mobile phone use while driving and expressing a position. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention the necessity of phones for work, the connection to the argument for a total ban is weak. The essay lacks a clear, sustained position, and the final paragraph is incomplete, which prevents a fully developed conclusion. To improve, ensure each paragraph directly supports your main argument and provides specific, well-explained examples rather than general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow between and within them is often disjointed. Transitions like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the ideas following them do not always align with these markers. For example, the second paragraph discusses the necessity of phones, which contradicts the prompt's premise, creating confusion. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the final paragraph is fragmented, which disrupts the overall progression of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. Phrases like 'excess use of mobile phone' and 'large number of' are used frequently. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'risking thing ever' and 'accident ratio' (instead of 'accident rate'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the presence of non-standard phrasing limit the score. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to traffic safety and technology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('teenagers dose', 'citizen record also effected'), incorrect verb forms ('excess using'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the final paragraph. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that tense usage is consistent throughout the piece.

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