Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is observed that a driver can be momentarily distracted while driving if he operates a mobile phone, which can cause fatal accidents and can lead to lifelong disabilities, and even deaths. Consequently, use of a phone by automobile driver should be prohibited, and penalized. I strongly agree with this believe as it can cause financial detrimental effects, but also leads to loss of daring lives.
Firstly, a moment of distruction can lead to a substantial amount of financial loss, and regret for long period of time. Using digital gadgets during operating a car can leads to accidents, which eventually cost you to pay for the damage. It will include your car and also the other one who get effected by this accident. For example, if you get into an accident, and the car or property of the other person will have damaged to his goods, which can be a legal issue sometimes. Subsequently, all that will leads to significant amount of loss.
On the other hand, this irresponsible way of driving can cause life threatening events, and even cost many innocent lives. For example, there are drastic increase of road traffic accident in major urban metropolitans because of reckless drinking. Emergency are packed up with these eme
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 208 words long. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, leading to an incomplete argument. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the second body paragraph is abruptly cut off, leaving the response unfinished. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full, balanced discussion and reach the required length to allow for sufficient development of your points. The current lack of a conclusion and the incomplete second paragraph prevent the response from being fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand' to signal the structure. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is truncated, which disrupts the logical flow. Referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical use of transitions makes the writing feel somewhat disjointed. To achieve a higher score, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that ideas are linked more fluidly throughout the entire response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'momentarily distracted', 'fatal accidents', and 'metropolitans'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'daring lives' (likely meaning 'dear lives' or 'precious lives'), 'distruction' (spelling error), and 'get effected' (should be 'affected'). These errors occasionally impede the precision of your argument. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations and refining your spelling to ensure your vocabulary is used accurately and naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. Examples include 'use of a phone... should be prohibited, and penalized' (punctuation error), 'can leads to' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'the car or property of the other person will have damaged' (incorrect tense/voice). While the meaning is generally understandable, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses.
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