Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Novadays,the using of phone's use by drivers become a highly debated theme in the society.While some people belive that its is not dangerous,ather is the mining to forbidden.

i will give the arguments of both sides before my own view.

Many people become important calls by driving and answer.Sometimes there is no danger,wenn the road is not empty and nobody can not distrube.Therefour,the driver must control the situation and take responsability.

ather sides there is nothing more important than the people life.For example only one second can change the situatiation: one child run to the street and take care of his cat or person with bicycle comes from the corner.If the are risk for people and children,we must take attention.

I firmly belive,that strong road lows can help stopping road deedline.

At my country it is forbidden to use phone for calling or sand massage,even the new low forbidden use the google maps.

Everything what we need by driving its attention.Even i belive,that load music distrube the driver.Every one must be consentrated by the road,see and listen everything beheind.To be responsable for self it is be responsable for all people participating the road.

I maked my driver licence at 40 years old,it was hard and difficult,because i need it to bring my children at school and kindergarden.I am responsable today for my life,my children and averybody at the road.I hope that every one driver makes same and protect everyone.

In conclusion,I am agree with distractions,cell phone must be forbidden use at the car.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt regarding whether cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal, presenting a clear personal position agreeing with the ban. The writer attempts to explore both sides initially, noting arguments about when driving might seem less dangerous, before strongly supporting the prohibition of phones to prevent tragic accidents. Ideas are generally relevant, but the development is somewhat superficial and the reasoning is occasionally constrained by limited language expression. For instance, the discussion on unexpected hazards like 'one child run to the street' touches on valid safety concerns but lacks full elaboration. The overall response covers all parts of the task sufficiently to meet the requirements for Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into a series of very short paragraphs and single-sentence lines, which disrupts the natural flow and logical progression of ideas. Although there are some attempts at cohesive devices—such as 'While some people', 'For example', and 'In conclusion'—their use is frequently awkward, and punctuation errors around these markers impede smooth reading. Paragraphing is not used effectively to group related points together, as seen with isolated sentences like 'i will give the arguments of both sides before my own view.' Referencing is also sometimes unclear. This organisational structure corresponds to Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0 based on general progression attempts.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical resource is very basic and contains numerous errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation. Examples include 'Novadays' for nowadays, 'the using of phone's use', 'mining to forbidden', 'sand massage' for send messages, 'deedline' for fatalities or deaths, and 'consentrated' for concentrated. While the writer manages to communicate basic meanings related to driving distractions and safety regulations, the vocabulary range is limited and noticeable errors occur frequently, causing occasional difficulty for the reader and placing this aspect firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside frequent faulty attempts at complex structures. There are persistent, major errors in punctuation, capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage throughout the essay. Examples of errors include 'its is not dangerous', 'wenn the road is not empty', 'Therefour', 'If the are risk', 'load music distrube', and 'I maked my driver licence'. Punctuation is particularly weak, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Because errors are very frequent and constantly strain meaning, the writing falls into the Band 4.0 category for grammar.

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