Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The drivers are getting ditracted by using the mobile phones while driving, which is hazardous. Therefore, mobile use should be banned. I completely agree with this perpective becuase of these tread can cause accidents and loose concentration on roads.

Despite having neccesity to see the maps, drivers often loose grip from the straring wheel and at the end they do not have plenty of time to apply breaks. To illustrate, which can not only cause accidents to themself but also either pedstrian or other driver can get harmed. For example, using a mobile phone while crossing a road can distract pedestrians, which may cause them to miss traffic signals and potentially result in hit-and-run accidents. So, drivers should stop using telephone on roads and stop reckless driving.

Additionaly, they often get distracted from either through loud musics or scrolling instagram, and end up in loosing focus from driving with the precuations. Precuations such as contruction ahed, speed bumps and etc. signs that shold not be missed. As a result, motorists can break the traffic rules that ment to be safe driving. For instance, high-speed highways needs accurate and serious driving, if drivers like truckers loose focus and potentially result in massive accidents and also traffic jam for a long time. Therefore, phones are shold be banned from using and also government can increase ticket price of braking rules.

In conclusion, I strongely agree with topic statement due to fact that accidents that associated with mobile use that can be worse for other drivers or pedestrians, and also they getting distracted and can loose concentration from roads. So, these should be banned or only allow use for watching a maps in dedicated location like holder on mirror and authorities can also take some steps to stop reckless driving.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening—“I completely agree”—and remains consistent in the conclusion. You give relevant reasons, including drivers losing concentration, missing road hazards, and the greater consequences of a truck driver’s mistake. These examples address the question, but some points are not fully explained or precisely connected to the claim. For instance, the example about pedestrians using phones while crossing shifts attention away from whether drivers’ phone use should be illegal. The final suggestion that phones could be allowed for viewing maps in a holder also qualifies your position, but you do not explain how this exception would be safe or fit with your call for a ban. Develop each reason and clarify the scope of the proposed law.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The paragraphs generally group related reasons, and signposts such as “To illustrate,” “As a result,” and “In conclusion” help show the intended progression. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The pedestrian example does not follow smoothly from the point about drivers losing their grip on the steering wheel, and “Despite having necessity to see the maps” introduces a concession that is not clearly resolved. The conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than bringing the argument together, and the map-holder exception creates an unresolved shift in position. Use clearer links between each claim and its example, and make references such as “these” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “distracted,” “traffic signals,” “high-speed highways,” and “traffic rules,” so the reader can follow the general argument. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “reckless driving” and “massive accidents.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the message harder to understand: “perpective,” “precautions,” and “braking rules” appear where more accurate forms or phrases are needed. Some combinations are unnatural, such as “loose grip from the steering wheel” and “construction ahead” used as a noun phrase. Build accuracy with common road-safety collocations, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure in “which may cause them to miss traffic signals” and a conditional example beginning “if drivers like truckers…”. This gives the response some variety, and the main message is usually understandable. However, several sentence patterns are faulty, particularly where clauses are joined or left incomplete. “To illustrate, which can not only cause accidents…” has no clear main clause, while “if drivers like truckers loose focus and potentially result…” lacks a clear grammatical subject for “result.” There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “high-speed highways needs” and “phones are should be banned.” Practise complete clause structures and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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