Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I strongly agree, that using a cell phone while driving should be strictly prohibited because it it is one of the main reason of road accidents.

Use of cell phone during driving is drangerous beacause it causes the driver to become distracted. so, mobile phone use should be made illegal. Driving is a very difficult task and to drive safe it is obligatory that all the concestrations of drivers should be on driving. A little carelessness can lead to a tragic accident.

In support of my opinion i am writing some examples of my experince. My uncle and I was traveling to another by car. We were on the highway, and it was quite busy. ON the way my uncle started using his cell phone and he was trying to connect with car music system, while he was connecting his attentions diverted to the mobile and sundanly a motorbike appears from the other side and my uncle got lost control over the car and car hits the motor bike. It was realy tragic for me, but luckly we remained safe. After that horrific accident I am in favour of that use of mobile while driving should be baned.

Driving is an uphill task, every year number of road accidents are increasing and the main reason is drivers negligence and use of moible.

For example last year when we were on the bus and we were traveling to northern areas of pakistan , the bus driver started calling to his friend. when he was answering phone call the bus collided with the road barrier.

so after witnessing tragic road accidents I, firmly believe that goverment must ban use of mobile phones while driving.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the opening—“I strongly agree”—and remains consistent in the conclusion. You give relevant reasons, including driver distraction and the risk of accidents, and support them with two personal examples involving a car and a bus. These examples make your argument concrete and show that you address the question. The response also explains why attention should remain on driving. However, the reasoning is not equally developed: the point that accidents are increasing and that negligence is a main cause is asserted rather than explained or supported. To strengthen the argument further, clarify why a legal ban is more effective than other measures and develop each example’s connection to the proposed law.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it states your view, gives supporting examples, and ends by restating your position. Paragraph breaks also help separate the main points. However, progression between ideas is not always clear. The opening repeats the prompt’s claim about distraction, and “For example” introduces the bus incident without clearly showing how it adds a distinct reason. Some linking phrases, such as “so” and “after that,” are used mechanically, while the shift from the car accident to general claims about accident numbers feels abrupt. Organise the body around two clearly distinct reasons, use topic sentences, and explain how each example supports its paragraph’s point. This would create a clearer line of development.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “distracted,” “tragic accident,” “highway,” and “road barrier,” and the reader can generally understand your examples. There are also attempts at more expressive language, such as “horrific accident” and “uphill task.” However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or imprecise phrases make the writing less clear, including “concestrations,” “sundanly,” “moible,” and “got lost control.” Some wording is repetitive, particularly repeated references to accidents and mobile-phone use. Aim for accurate topic-specific collocations and vary repeated terms; proofreading spelling and choosing more precise expressions will make your argument easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “A little carelessness can lead to a tragic accident” and the account of your uncle connecting his phone. This gives some variety, but control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation sometimes make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “My uncle and I was traveling,” “my uncle got lost control,” and the long sentence beginning “while he was connecting.” There are also sentence-boundary and capitalization problems, such as starting “so” after a full stop and writing “ON.” Practise accurate past-tense narration and break long sentences into clear clauses, while checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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