Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Distracted driving is a serious concern in this modern era. Drivers often use cell phones while driving which is hazardous as it causes accidents and leads to careless driving. Consequently, authorities should force some legal laws to mitigate this problem. I totally agree with this statement and reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, one of the most significant reason is that using hand gadgets while driving, results in collisions, which may become a serious concern of accident and vehicle damage. For instance, one text message while boating may cost plentiful amounts. In addition, there are several expenses associated with accidents such as towing services, rental coverages and other high insurance premiums in future. To mitigate this problem, some action must be taken by the officials such as passing a bill, in which the distracted driving such be made illegal.

Secondly, while using cell phones on highways is detrimental, it not only a reason of unnecessary slow driving, but also drivers often miss the exits that causes traffic congestion and they have to drive more Kilometres which may late them from their destinations. In other words, The city of Toronto where dwellers have their scheduled works and they have to drive on highway 401 which is sixteen lane highway. If anyone miss an exit there, they may get late by 1 hour especially during rush hours. Therefore, to save that unnecessary time and traffic some possible laws should be enforced where applicable.

To conclude, although using cell phones while driving does not results in traffic violation, it may cause risks. As a result, to eliminate such risks government should

make it illegal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I totally agree,” and the conclusion returns to the proposal that phone use should be illegal. You give relevant reasons, including collision risks and missed exits causing congestion, and the Toronto highway example helps make the second point more concrete. However, the reasons are not developed equally. The first paragraph shifts from safety to repair and insurance costs without explaining how these costs support making phone use illegal, while the boating example is not clearly connected to driving. The claim that phone use “does not results in traffic violation” also creates uncertainty about your final position. Explain how each example supports the proposed law and keep the argument consistently focused on driver distraction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To commence with,” “Secondly,” and “To conclude” make the main stages easy to identify, and each body paragraph has a central topic. At times, however, cohesion feels mechanical, and links between ideas are not always clear. For example, the discussion of towing and insurance costs follows the collision point but does not explicitly connect those costs to the case for a legal ban. The Toronto example is also introduced with “In other words,” although it functions more as an example. Use linking expressions that show the precise relationship between claims, and make the conclusion follow clearly from the reasons presented.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic-related vocabulary, including “distracted driving,” “collisions,” “traffic congestion,” and “rush hours,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “mitigate this problem” and “detrimental.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes make the meaning less precise: “force some legal laws,” “plentiful amounts,” “rental coverages,” and “late them from their destinations.” Some repetition of “problem,” “driving,” and “laws” also limits flexibility. Aim for natural collocations and precise wording—for example, “introduce legislation,” “substantial costs,” and “delay their arrival.” Proofread word forms and capitalisation, including “kilometres” and “the city of Toronto.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “If anyone miss an exit” and a contrast structure with “not only…but also.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction reduce accuracy. Examples include “one of the most significant reason,” “it not only a reason,” “that causes traffic congestion,” and “does not results.” The sentence beginning “To mitigate this problem” also contains a faulty construction: “the distracted driving such be made illegal.” Review subject–verb agreement and auxiliary verbs, and check that each clause has a complete, correctly formed verb. More accurate control of these structures would make your complex sentences clearer.

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