Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's world, everyone has a cell phone and they are always using it for different purposes. One group believes that using phone during driving has more harmful because it can easily distract the driver. However, some people think that government should banned a cell phones when they are driving. In this essay I will discuss both the points and state my opinion.

To initiate, some people using cell-phone excessively while they are driving. It is more dangerous for driver and other drivers as well. For example, people do face-time or video call while they are driving and they are distracted and they might met with an accident and losing their life too. Furthermore, some people put all attention on there phones and they are not looking properly at road signs and they can hit the pedestrian. For instance, a driver can not see school bus has stop sign and they can hit a children. Since sometimes drivers uses Gps from the phones and doing SOS call during emergency situation According to Toronto times report 70% of accidents happends because of distracted driving.

However, some believes that government should banned the cell phones uses while they are driving. If driver is not distracted by anything it will reduce the chances of they get an accident. To examplify, people can watch the all road sign and drive carefully when there all attention on the road.

To conclude that, regulatory bodies should impose a partial banned on the cell phones uses rather-than completely banned for the drivers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the topic by explaining how phone use can distract drivers and by giving examples involving pedestrians and a school bus. However, the response does not fully answer the central question about whether phone use should be illegal: the opening says you will discuss “both the points,” and the conclusion proposes a “partial ban,” but you do not explain clearly what this would allow or why it is preferable to a full ban. The paragraph beginning “However” largely repeats the case for restricting phones rather than developing a distinct opposing view. The accident statistic is relevant, but its source and connection to your argument are not explained. State your position directly and develop the reasons for your chosen policy more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion, and the examples generally relate to the topic. Basic signposting such as “Furthermore,” “However” and “To conclude” helps readers follow the broad structure. However, progression between ideas is uneven: the paragraph introduced by “However” does not present a clear counterargument, and the conclusion introduces a partial ban without preparing or explaining this position in the body. Some links are mechanical or unclear, particularly the long sentence beginning “Since sometimes drivers uses Gps,” which combines several points without clear connections. Organise each paragraph around one purpose, use clear references, and explain how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “distracted,” “road signs,” “pedestrian” and “accidents,” so the main subject is usually clear. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “emergency situation” and “regulatory bodies.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less natural: “has more harmful,” “partial banned,” and “cell phones uses” do not express the intended ideas correctly. Spelling and form errors such as “happends” and “Gps” also reduce control. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing legislation and road safety, and check word forms and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because,” “when” and “that,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur frequently in verb forms and agreement: “government should banned,” “some believes,” and “drivers uses” need corrected forms. Articles, plurals and sentence construction are also problematic in phrases such as “a children” and “they might met with an accident.” The sentence beginning “Since sometimes drivers uses Gps” is incomplete and difficult to follow, while punctuation is missing before the statistic. These errors can make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past or modal verb patterns, then use shorter, complete sentences before attempting longer structures.

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