Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

my opinion regared driving is that,this very harmful for life.any anye must be prohibted about that it is to dangrous while the last report on road excident is on extrema level peple mis drive that casus of injuried death case during driving using mobile phone must be prohibted peaple lost thire lives daily with this unresponsible behvior so must be initiaive about that to overcmoe the problem and take some imidiate steps and make some rules on must be foolow to reduce the prblem that we face in our daily life traffic wardrn shold be attentive on their job and charged the challan of those people who are not follow the instructions the department must be aware all aspects or focus on their duties and enforce the comitment regarding that govt paly most vital role to make a polices and train the people to apply on all cctv cameras must be installs on all high traffic road that casus some serious cases ariesd.the world internation reported daily almost 50000 cases recognised in which more than are related sub contonantial asia. over soeed of car and untrained people use the vhicle that hve no idea to drive on road that is the main causes distracted the divers. govternment allow to departemt not any vhicle will used on the road without ant licence and any teenager not drive any cars or vhicle on the road without certificate,awerness is most important for all people to save the life from extreame type of excidents

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a relevant position by saying phone use while driving is harmful and should be prohibited, and you offer related measures such as penalties, CCTV, driver training and licensing rules. These points show an attempt to address the issue and provide reasons. However, the response does not clearly explain the extent of your agreement, and several ideas are listed rather than developed. For example, the claim about daily deaths and the reported number of cases is not explained or supported, while the discussion shifts to speeding and inexperienced drivers without linking these clearly to phone use. State your position directly, then develop two or three relevant reasons with clear explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response contains several relevant points, including enforcement, public awareness and licensing, but they are presented as one continuous sequence rather than organised paragraphs. As a result, the reader has difficulty seeing where one reason ends and another begins. Connections such as “so,” “and” and “that” are repeated, and some links do not clarify the relationship between ideas. For instance, the move from phone-related accidents to CCTV, then to international statistics and teenage drivers is abrupt. Use a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct reasons, and a conclusion. Within each paragraph, present one main point, explain it, and use precise linking phrases to show how the supporting detail relates.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “prohibited,” “distracted,” “enforce,” “licence” and “awareness,” and you communicate a general concern about road safety. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to understand, such as “extrema level,” “unresponsible behavior” and “over soeed.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “charged the challan” and “apply on all CCTV cameras.” Aim for accurate, familiar expressions before trying more complex vocabulary. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for road safety, such as “impose a fine,” “enforce traffic laws” and “raise public awareness.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

There are attempts to express cause and consequence, for example in the opening claim that phone use is dangerous and in the later discussion of rules intended to reduce accidents. However, sentence structures are very limited, and long strings of clauses are joined without clear punctuation. This makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Errors in sentence formation, verb forms, articles and agreement are frequent; for example, “traffic wardrn shold be attentive on their job and charged the challan” does not maintain a clear grammatical structure, and “CCTV cameras must be installs” has an incorrect verb form. Use shorter, complete sentences, with a clear subject and verb, and practise basic clause patterns before combining ideas with “because,” “which” or “therefore.”

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