Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Cell phone has become an addiction for people, due to which the continous use of this gadget had made a simple life quite complexed. Now a days people are seen using cell phone all the time even if you are in some family gathering majority of the people would be indulged in cell phone so much that they do not even know about the conversation happening around them. The excess use of the device had become dnagerous as well now since even while driving people tend to use their phones and end up in severe accidents due to negligence. I believe this is quite true and this eassy is going to explain if this is an absolute fact or are there any advantages of it as well.

there was a time when people used to work on their computers with evolution the caomputers turned into laptops and then into a mere handy device cell phone. it has become so easy to work commincate and actually work on projects through phone quite easy, One of the advantages of cellphones is that while driving if a person doesn't know about the route the Google maps can help them with reaching their destination and the person can travel conviniently without getting lost.

The problem arises in the misuse of this device, or as it has been said, excess of everything is bad.When we focus soley on the use of cell phone while driving people do not focus on the road, their eyes are rather sticked to the phone watching a reel or making one, either a person is chatting wih a family member or a friend they lack the attention they need to have on the ro. For example once i booked a ride and the traffic was jam packed plus the travel time might be around 30 minutes. the driver was talking on a call and was least bothered about the traffic, howevere i requested him multiple time to kindly focus on the road and to my disbelief we came to a point where we were almost about to hit a bike.

We hear about horrible accidents every other day and according to the researches 75 percents of accidents happen due to the distracted driver who is busy using his phone the whole time. Even though their are rules for traffic and driver has to pay certain oenality for using his device while driving still it is taken for granted.

In my opinion, we can not make it entirely illegal to use cell phones

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic and give relevant reasons for restricting phone use, especially the risk of drivers losing attention; the ride-share incident is a useful personal example. However, your position is not fully clear or sustained. The introduction says you will consider advantages, while the final sentence begins, “we can not make it entirely illegal,” but the response ends before explaining this view or stating what rules you support. The navigation example is relevant, yet it does not distinguish safe, hands-free use from distracting use. To strengthen the response, state your degree of agreement clearly and develop a balanced conclusion that directly answers whether phone use should be illegal and under what conditions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has recognisable paragraphs, moving from general context to a possible benefit, then risks and a personal example. This gives it some organisation, and phrases such as “The problem arises” help signal a shift. However, progression is uneven: the opening is lengthy and general, the paragraph about technological development does not connect smoothly to the argument, and the final paragraph stops before completing the conclusion. Linking expressions such as “however” and “even though” are used, but the relationship between ideas is sometimes unclear or repetitive. For example, the discussion of distraction repeats several forms of phone use without advancing the argument. Plan each paragraph around one clear point and use a complete conclusion to bring the reasoning together.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “distracted,” “negligence,” “destination,” and “traffic,” and the reader can generally understand your meaning. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or awkward choices make the writing less clear, such as “complexed,” “indulged in cell phone,” and “eyes are rather sticked to the phone.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “continous,” “dnagerous,” and “conviniently,” which reduce precision. Some expressions are repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “cell phone” and “use.” Build a more accurate set of collocations for road safety and regulation, and proofread spelling and word forms. For example, “be absorbed in their phones” and “keep their eyes on the road” would express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “since,” “if,” and “even though.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “Cell phone has become an addiction for people,” where the article and construction are problematic, and “the excess use of the device had become dangerous,” where the tense does not fit the general claim. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: the long opening sentence and the sentence beginning “there was a time” run several ideas together. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns, articles, tense consistency, and punctuation, then check each sentence for a clear main clause.

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