Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in my point you view , using mobile phone during driving is very dangerous for human life . and all over all world all countries made illegal . In our country most people never follow the rules specially uneducated peoples.but they dont know one tiny mistake causes death . whenever i listened news about road accident every accident causes by mobile phone .

I never prefer anyone use mobile during driving. whenever i drive a car or bike , if anyone calls me i stop my drive by road side and then check my phone . almost people take nothing serious these rules and this mistake is cause of death my innocent people ,which cross the road or standing roadside.

I will gave example my personal experience. once upon we all friends made plan for northern areas in summer season. we are all 5 peoples in car me sit on front seat and my friend ahmed drive a car. we entered our nearly toll plaza . when we spend 30 min on motorway. i saw in side mirror that car which colour is black follows our car . but the driver of this car using mobile phone and changes lane after 2 mins. they never change there routine . And suuddenly they hits our car from side . our driver controls cars but our car crash with side pillar . we all frightend and see each other face because we have none mistake . and this black car hits with opposite pillar and more crash.All are mood are spoil.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You take a clear position against phone use while driving, and the response stays relevant to the question. You give a general reason—that distraction can cause fatal accidents—and support it with your own practice of stopping by the roadside to check calls. The detailed motorway collision also provides a relevant personal example. However, the argument focuses mainly on the danger rather than explaining why making phone use illegal is the best response; for instance, you could discuss how a law might deter drivers or protect other road users. The opening claim that all countries have made it illegal is also unsupported and too broad. Developing the policy argument and explaining the example’s implications more clearly would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall sequence: you state your view, describe your own safe practice, and then recount an accident. This gives the reader a general sense of how the example supports your position. However, the ideas are presented in long blocks without clear paragraphing, and the progression within the accident story is sometimes difficult to follow. Connectors such as “whenever” are repeated and do not always express the intended relationship, while “And” begins a sentence where a clearer link would help. Some references are also unclear, such as “they” and “our car” in the collision account. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons, and example, and make each event and its connection to your argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You communicate the central topic using relevant basic vocabulary, including “mobile phone,” “driving,” “accident,” and “roadside,” and the personal account includes some useful detail. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward or unclear. For example, “in my point you view” does not express your opinion naturally, “all are mood are spoil” is difficult to interpret, and “controls cars” is not an appropriate phrase for describing the driver’s response. There are also spelling errors such as “suuddenly” and “frightend.” Build a more precise range for discussing distraction, road safety, and legal consequences, and check spelling and common word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “if anyone calls me i stop my drive by road side and then check my phone.” This shows an effort to express connected events, but control of sentence structure and basic forms is inconsistent. For example, “once upon we all friends made plan” has an unclear clause structure, and “they hits our car” does not maintain subject–verb agreement or the appropriate tense. Several sentences run together, as in the account of the collision, and punctuation and capitalisation are often missing. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use consistent past tense when narrating the accident. More accurate sentence boundaries would make your meaning easier to follow.

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