Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

As we all know cell phones have become an essential part of our lives.From making calls,voice or text messages to sharing curent location,photos and vides all became possible due to this smart device therefore if we look around ourselves,every person is seen using his mobile.

Importance of mobiles cannot be denied but there are some limits of using these.Some of the precautionary measures must be taken while making use of it.For example using a mobile while driving is one of the most dangerous habbit.Many people are used to it which can lead to severe damage by causing an accident,as the use of mobile can divert the attention of the driver.

Many people say that sometimes it is the need of the hour to use it.For instance if we have to follow the location through the map,or there is an urgent call.Some also say that we have a complete control over the ride so its all safe to do so.

But in my opinion its defenitely a distract and should be made illegal.There are many cases of accidents reported due to the use of mobiles.Sometimes the use of side mirrors of the vehicles or traffic signal is over looked just because of the diversion of attention.Particularly when it is dark,the light coming out of your device can effect the sight and the driver have a blur vision of outside.If the driver has something urgent to do with his cell,in this scenario a driver can park his car on the safe side of the road and then can do the needful.Its for the sake of both drivers and others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that using a phone while driving should be illegal, and you give relevant reasons, including distraction, missed traffic signals and impaired vision at night. You also acknowledge opposing views, such as using a map or answering an urgent call, then suggest pulling over safely. This addresses the task, but some points are more fully covered than others. The counterarguments are mentioned briefly rather than examined, and claims about accidents and night-time vision would be stronger with a specific example or explanation. To develop the response further, explain why the risks outweigh the convenience and clarify whether your proposed ban would allow hands-free use or require drivers to stop for all phone tasks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the importance of phones, explains the danger of using them while driving, presents opposing views, and then states your position. Connectors such as “For example,” “For instance,” and “But in my opinion” help signal these stages. However, some links feel mechanical, and several ideas are crowded into long sentences, making the progression less smooth. The opening lists phone uses but does not clearly lead into the argument, while the final paragraph combines accident evidence, night-time visibility and the practical alternative of parking. Use clearer paragraph breaks and develop one main point at a time; also make references such as “it” and “this scenario” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “essential,” “precautionary measures,” “divert the attention,” “urgent call” and “traffic signal.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation and spelling are noticeable: “a distract” does not express the intended idea, “effect the sight” is unsuitable here, and “habbit,” “defenitely,” “curent” and “vides” are misspelled. Some phrases, such as “do the needful,” are also less natural in this context. Aim for precise, idiomatic wording and check spelling carefully; this will make your argument clearer and more fluent without changing its substance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “If the driver has something urgent to do with his cell…” and a reason clause explaining that phone use can divert attention. The overall meaning is generally understandable, but errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms are persistent enough to limit accuracy. For example, “every person is seen using his mobile” is awkwardly structured, “the driver have a blur vision” has an agreement error, and “the use of side mirrors … or traffic signal is over looked” needs more controlled construction. Several sentences run together without spaces or appropriate punctuation. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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