Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes I'm agree with this using cell phone while in driving is illegal and crime.

never use a cell phone during driving because it's also harmfull for you and other drivers also

that's why

I'm gonna tell my also experience is i was used cell phone while during riding a bike then i was crashed from bike to another bike.

this is my example that is my first and last mistake i doing in my life.

Now we discuss about that using cell phone during driving or riding is biggest crime and illegal in many countries.

if you're using your cell phone during driving so you take your life to risk of accident and also Another person life so Stop using your phone during driving.

some people using phone during driving because of distraction of social media they use any social media app during driving and take a risk his life to this illegal activity.

so my advice is that never uss a phone during driving.

even if the call is very important for you so stop your car or bike in the side of road or parking lot and then talk to call this way is very safe and 0 risk.

so don't take your life and another person life in risk thinkung about yourself and your family and other self or another family.

if anybody life goes this risk so your family and another family heart is very hurted.

that why look your self and your family and also Another life and there family life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that phone use while driving should be illegal, and you give relevant reasons, including the risk to other road users and your personal bike accident. The suggestion to pull over before taking an important call also offers a practical response. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The personal example is mentioned but not explained in enough detail to show how distraction caused the crash, and the point about social media is asserted rather than supported. To strengthen the response, explain your reasons more fully and connect each example directly to why a legal ban is justified.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: it states your view, gives a personal example, discusses risks, and ends with advice. Some linking phrases, such as “that's why” and “so,” show attempts to connect ideas. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and several points repeat the same warning without advancing the argument. The standalone “that's why” also interrupts the flow, while “Now we discuss about that” does not create a clear transition. Group the introduction, reasons and examples, and conclusion into separate paragraphs, and use links that show how each point supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “distracted,” “accident,” “illegal,” and “risk,” so the main message is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the reader work to interpret your meaning. For example, “biggest crime” is an imprecise description of phone use, and “heart is very hurted” does not express the intended emotional effect naturally. Spelling errors such as “harmfull,” “uss,” and “thinkung” also weaken control. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for road safety and consequences, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate your main opinion through short statements and make some attempts to combine ideas, for example with “because” and “even if.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, sentence construction, and punctuation. “Yes I'm agree” should be “Yes, I agree,” while “I was used cell phone” needs a correct past-tense form, such as “I was using a cell phone.” The sentence beginning “if you're using your cell phone…” also needs clearer structure and punctuation. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses to explain causes, examples, and consequences.

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