Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Using a cell phone while driving is very dangerous because it can distract drivers and can cause problems. Furthermore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal. I am largely agree with this statement.

To begin with, my first reason is that it can cause the major accidents. If the driver is on a call, he might be get distracted from his driving sapecially when he is on the higways and busy roads which can cause the danger not only for the other people's life but also for the driver as well. For instance, according to a survey which is conducted in 2019 in India, shows that 80% of accidents happens because of the drivers who prefer to use cell phones while driving. Furthermore, it can also distract them to maintain the speed limit and follow the traffic rules. Beacsue if drivers are busy in the cell phones they can't focus on

the speed limit divided by area which can cause problem for the people who are living there and also for the other vichels.

On the other hand, the one reason for disagreement is that if the cell phones will be illegal for the drivers than it will be not justify for them. Beacuse may be they can have any emergency and need to make a call for help so, in that case they have to rely on strangers for help.

In conclusion, I think there should be a law that no one can pick calls while driving but they can after going to a safe place or on the side of the road.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you largely support making phone use illegal, while recognising an emergency-related objection. The accident-risk argument is relevant and supported with an example, and you also explain how phone use may interfere with speed limits and traffic rules. However, the opposing point is only briefly developed, and the conclusion shifts to banning calls specifically rather than clarifying your view on all cell-phone use, such as texting or hands-free use. The survey statistic is presented as evidence but would be more convincing if its source or relevance were explained. To strengthen the response, develop the emergency counterargument and explain how a law could allow safe emergency use while still restricting distracting phone activity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a main supporting paragraph, a counterargument, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other hand” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, some connections are mechanical, and the long first body paragraph combines several points—accidents, speed limits, and traffic rules—without clearly separating or fully developing them. The sentence beginning “Because if drivers are busy…” is also difficult to follow, and the final paragraph does not fully resolve the contrast between the two sides. Use clearer topic sentences and divide related ideas into more manageable units, with references that make the relationship between each claim and its explanation explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “distracted,” “accidents,” “speed limit,” “traffic rules,” and “emergency.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. Examples include “cause the major accidents,” “maintain the speed limit,” and “rely on strangers for help.” Spelling errors such as “sapecially,” “Beacsue,” and “vichels” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn common collocations for road safety and legislation, and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you express the distinction between using a phone in a distracting way and using it safely in an emergency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional and relative clauses, as in “If the driver is on a call…” and “which can cause the danger…”. The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction remain. For example, “I am largely agree” should be “I largely agree,” and “he might be get distracted” should be “he might get distracted.” In “80% of accidents happens,” the verb should agree with the plural noun, while “if the cell phones will be illegal” uses an unsuitable tense pattern for a conditional. Practise building accurate conditional sentences and checking subject–verb agreement; this will make your complex ideas clearer and more controlled.

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