Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's busy world, Every individual is so occupied in work and other activities around him/her that sometimes we just forget to take a break for ourselves and leave our smartphones. Because most of the things nowadays is done through this small device that it is has became the only source of our entertainment as well as a helper to complete our everyday tasks like writing an email to a manager or even buying groceries sometimes.

While talking about that, I would not ignore the fact that sometimes I myself use my smartphone while driving because I don't make myself believe the fact that making a stop for 5 minutes on the side of the road is much safer then risking my own and others life on the road. This has not been just my problem every single human or a grown adult go through that everyday that is so busy with there life from replying to a simple short text message even while driving which has led to so many accidents which we see on the news channels almost everyday.

Most recent studies show that 3 out of 10 accidents happen everyday due to distracted driving. We can't blame anyone because I believe we all go through that at some point of time. But what I acknowledge and think is it should be made illegal so that we can understand everyone has the right to reach there home safely and we should not risk atleast not some other inncocents's life to take in our hands.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear view that phone use while driving should be illegal, especially in the final paragraph, and you connect this position to the risk of accidents and the safety of other road users. Your personal admission that you sometimes use your phone also makes the issue relevant, while the reference to accident statistics attempts to support your argument. However, the response only partly develops the task: it does not explain what the law should prohibit or why making use illegal would reduce the danger, and the statistic is not explained or sourced. The opening discussion of smartphones as tools for everyday tasks takes up space without directly advancing the argument. Develop two focused reasons and support each with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction about smartphones, a paragraph describing personal behaviour, and a final paragraph stating the proposed legal response. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “While talking about that” and “But what I acknowledge” signal shifts in the discussion. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph moves from busy lives to entertainment and shopping, then the next shifts abruptly to driving. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and references such as “that” and “we all go through that” are vague. Use a direct introduction, organise each body paragraph around one reason, and make links between ideas more precise rather than relying on broad transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main issue, including “distracted driving,” “accidents,” “smartphone,” and “illegal.” There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “on the side of the road” and “reach there home safely.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow: “make myself believe the fact,” “every single human,” and “take in our hands” do not express the intended ideas clearly. Spelling errors such as “inncocents's” and “there” for “their” also affect accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for road safety and legal restrictions, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a relative clause in “a grown adult … that is so busy.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “most of the things nowadays is done” has incorrect agreement and passive form, while “it is has became” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence also uses an unnecessary capital in “Every,” and several sentences run on without clear punctuation. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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