Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I am going on debate the that using a cell phone about driving is very dangerous. Because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers shuohld be illegal. And i am completely agree about this opnion. Because cell phone use about the drivning is very dangerous of our life and many other peoples. Many accidents and mishaps using the mobile, when they driving. Many young peopel and chilrder are using mobile in the absense of driving. And mobile phone use during the driving. This is illegal and traffic police arrested you and fine for them. And many adults very fast driving in car and bikes. Many road accidents i have been seen in the busy road. And i request of theeir parents to check out your child when they deive in busy roads. And one most impotant thing check out your vechile, when you go for a ride, check your breaks and tyres and fuel and also check the engine oil. And drive slowly or save over life, because your life is most important for your family and frieds. When i am young, i have many mistakes in driving and my teacher punished them for the mistakes. So i suggest you firstbof all apply your lisence in traffic police pakistan. when you have passed a test of driving. Police inspector check your line and rules to follow them about rules of driving. Inspector fill his paper work and issue a chhalan form to pay in punjab bank and collect your lisence in police station.Thanyou, for your time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your position is clear: you completely agree that drivers’ phone use should be illegal, and you give relevant concerns about distraction, accidents, and protecting families. However, the response only minimally develops the argument. Several points—such as checking tyres, fuel, and engine oil, obtaining a licence, and police paperwork—move away from the question rather than explaining why a legal ban is justified. The examples about young people and accidents are asserted but not explained or supported with a specific incident. The response is also 3 words below the 250-word minimum; the 15 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. To strengthen the answer, explain how phone use affects driving and develop one or two relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable overall direction: you state your agreement, then give reasons and advice related to road safety. Some linking words, including “Therefore,” “And,” and “Because,” show attempts to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and the ideas shift abruptly from phone distraction to vehicle maintenance, parental supervision, licensing, and police procedures. Repeated use of “And” and “Because” does not create clear progression, while some references, such as “them” in “my teacher punished them,” are difficult to follow. Organise the response into paragraphs—position, developed reasons and examples, and conclusion—and use links that show the relationship between each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “dangerous,” “distracted,” “accidents,” and “traffic police,” so the general subject is usually understandable. There are also attempts to use topic-specific terms such as “licence” and “inspector.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or spellings make the message harder to read, for example “mishaps using the mobile,” “absense of driving,” and “chhalan form.” Phrases such as “many other peoples” and “save over life” are not natural in this context. Build a more accurate range of road-safety expressions and check spelling; for instance, describe a phone as “a distraction” and refer to “road collisions” or “traffic offences.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts some longer sentences with “because” and “when.” This gives you a starting point for expressing reasons, but sentence boundaries and basic grammatical patterns are often inaccurate. For example, “I am going on debate” and “i am completely agree” do not form correct structures, while “Many accidents and mishaps using the mobile, when they driving” lacks a clear main clause and correct verb forms. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, and several sentences begin with “Because” or “And” without being joined clearly to the preceding idea. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, correct tense and agreement, and joining reasons to main clauses with accurate punctuation.

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