Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Addiction to smartphones is increasing day by day, especially while driving a vehicle which became the reason of distraction. Phones should be strictly prohibited on roads. We will talk about this further in this eassy.

First and foremost, I'm strongly agree with this statement, as usage of electronic devices while driving may cause serious accident on streets, which may lead to injury for other people as well as for driver. The person get distracted within a minute and somehow hit someone in font of them. In some cases the individual die on the spot due to your mistake. For instance, few days ago I went for grocery shopping near my home. I see someone scrolling Instagram hit the curb on the way and there were two children over there waiting for their bus. Anyhow, they were safe just by inch. Afterthat I called Police and they handled everything.

In addtion to this, It's also not legal to have your cell phone in hands while using automobile. I can understand that once a while It is important to take calls, for that we need to pull car safely on roadside by doing this the traffic around you will be safe or we should switch calls to handsfree if not able to stop at that time. For example, My dad always say that if you want to recieve the phone please stop the car or put it on handsfree.

In conclusion, everyone in this world should follow the rules made for our safety, which may also helps to decline the crashes over time. Stay safe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly support making phone use while driving illegal, and both body paragraphs give relevant reasons. The first explains the risk of crashes and injury, supported by the near-miss involving children; the second suggests stopping safely or using hands-free calling. This addresses the main parts of the question. However, some points are less fully developed: the second paragraph shifts from whether phone use should be illegal to practical alternatives, without explaining which uses the law should prohibit or how hands-free use affects distraction. The opening also promises to discuss the issue rather than stating a precise position, and the conclusion mainly repeats a general appeal to follow safety rules. Develop the policy argument and connect each example more explicitly to your stance.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas generally progress from the danger of distraction to possible ways of handling calls, and signposts such as “First and foremost,” “In addition to this” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the stages. At times, however, cohesion feels mechanical, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, “Afterthat I called Police” follows the near-miss but does not explain what happened or how it supports the argument. The second paragraph also moves quickly from legality to hands-free calls. Use clearer references and explain the relationship between each example and the point it illustrates; this would make the progression more consistently logical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “distracted,” “serious accident,” “injury,” “handsfree” and “crashes.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “scrolling Instagram” and “pull car safely on roadside.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which limits precision: “Addiction to smartphones is increasing day by day” is a broad and unnatural opening for this argument, while “hit the curb” does not clearly describe the danger to the children. Spelling errors such as “eassy,” “addtion,” “recieve” and “Afterthat” are noticeable. Choose more precise collocations and proofread spelling so the reader can focus on your reasoning rather than decoding the wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause in “as usage of electronic devices while driving may cause serious accident” and a conditional structure in “if you want to recieve the phone please stop the car.” The main meaning is usually understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur across the response. Examples include “I'm strongly agree” (use “I strongly agree”), “The person get distracted,” and “which may also helps.” The sentence beginning “The person get distracted within a minute and somehow hit someone” also shifts awkwardly between singular and plural reference. Some punctuation is missing around introductory clauses and quotations. Practise accurate sentence patterns and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms, while retaining your attempts at longer structures.

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