Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people feel that the government should pay the costs of running universities so that a university education will be free for anyone who wants it.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Few masess feel that the goverment need to pay the costs of running universites therefore the university education will be free for anyone who want it because many people no pay the university education fee so I am agree with the statement and I will discuse about it below up coming paragraph.

In commence with,Now days many people do work job and everyday run behind the money but in these days verything is much more expensive. In other words,If they are everyday two job they can not save many and they can not servive in the home but if university education fee need to pay every month then can not do because their are already facing much problem in life.For enstance,Few years before one news was lot viral on the social media where one student was good in study but his parents was not money for their education and he did suside fanially.Therefore,Some people feel that goverment should pay the costs of university educaton because they can fored it.

Furthermore,Nowadays many people finding good jobs for better future if they get good job in life they can save many and they can give to well study to their child but in these days jobs are very less because now is so many new tecnology is coming which fast doing work in any job.To elaborate it,If any person find job that company give less salary then opfeelposite person feel if they will get this job then other person will get it .For example,Last month in china many people was living without job but their children was much tailented in study but no was posible for their future.

In conclusion,Many is important is thesedays but less job people facing it and they can not pay fee the university education that why they want the government pay the fee of university.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by expressing a clear position of agreement regarding free university education. However, the development of ideas is limited and hindered by severe linguistic constraints. The main arguments concerning financial struggles and job market pressures are presented, but they remain superficial and are often obscured by poor sentence construction and lack of clarity. Key points, such as the mention of a news story in India or the job situation in China, are introduced abruptly without sufficient elaboration to fully support the thesis. According to the descriptors for Band 4, the response touches upon the task but lacks adequate development, though a clear personal stance is maintained throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response exhibits significant weaknesses in coherence and cohesion. While paragraphing is attempted with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, the internal organisation within paragraphs is heavily disrupted. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'In commence with' instead of 'To commence with', and 'therefore' or 'furthermore' placed without logical structural backing. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Sentences often run together without proper punctuation, resulting in a text that lacks overall logical flow and places a heavy burden on the reader to decipher the connections between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. There are numerous spelling errors such as 'masess' for masses, 'goverment' for government, 'universites' for universities, 'servive' for survive, 'enstance' for instance, 'suside' for suicide, 'fanially' for finally, 'fored' for afford, 'tecnology' for technology, and 'tailented' for talented. Word choice is frequently inaccurate, such as 'run behind the money' or 'lot viral'. These pervasive lexical inaccuracies and spelling errors severely strain the reader and impede successful communication, aligning closely with the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost entirely on faulty attempts at complex sentences joined improperly by conjunctions like 'because' and 'so'. There is a near-complete absence of accurate complex structures, and basic grammatical rules such as subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and article usage are constantly violated (e.g., 'parents was not money', 'people finding good jobs', 'no was posible'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with comma splices and run-on sentences dominating the text. Errors are so frequent that they constantly distort meaning and cause severe difficulty for the reader, which is characteristic of a Band 4 performance.

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