Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that children learn better when they are placed in classes with children of similar academic abilities. Others believe that children learn better when they are in classes with children representing a diverse range of academic abilities.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Children learn much better when they are studying with their peer group because it helps them to be confident in themselves and believe what others can do they can do it better.

In our modern world today, parents now understand the value and quality of good education with their peer group no longer adults education but studying with their age mate.

firstly, Confident in themselves, when a Child is in class her age mates can will be free to interact with share knowledge with her friends.

No one laughs at anybody because the are equal.

Also, they compete with each other to be better in their studies engaging themselves in activities like debate, quiz, easy waiting, going for competition etc.

Significantly the will be more responsible and good citizen.

people also believe that children learn better when they are in classes with representing a diverse range of academic well depends on the child performance to cope with their age mate.

l am supporting children studying with their peer group

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You give a clear preference for children learning with peers of similar age or ability, and you offer relevant reasons, including confidence, interaction, and competition. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the view in favour of mixed academic abilities is only briefly mentioned: “people also believe” this, without explaining its benefits or giving an example. Your own position is also stated only briefly at the end. The response is 158 words, so it is 92 words below the 250-word minimum; the 11 words copied from the prompt are excluded. To develop the response, explain both sides in separate sections, support each with a specific example, and make your opinion clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic sequence of ideas: you introduce your preference, give reasons related to confidence and competition, briefly mention the alternative, and conclude with your support for peer-group learning. Connectors such as “firstly” and “also” help signal some progression. However, the response is not divided into clear paragraphs, and the shift to the opposing view is abrupt. Several ideas are difficult to follow because links between them are unclear, particularly “In our modern world today” and the sentence beginning “people also believe.” Use one paragraph for each view and a final paragraph for your opinion. Add clear transitions such as “By contrast” and “In my view,” and ensure each sentence develops the point before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “confident,” “interact,” “share knowledge,” “compete,” and “responsible.” These words help communicate your main ideas about learning with peers. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “peer group,” “age mate,” and “better in their studies.” Some expressions, including “easy waiting” and “good citizen,” do not clearly convey the intended meaning. Aim for more precise academic collocations and check that each phrase expresses your point accurately. For example, you could describe students as “working collaboratively,” “competing constructively,” or “making academic progress,” and use “mixed-ability classes” when discussing the alternative view.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main topic is generally identifiable. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “when a Child is in class her age mates can will be free” combines incompatible verb forms, while “No one laughs at anybody because the are equal” has an unclear subject and faulty sentence construction. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “firstly” and “Child.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation. You can then add controlled complex structures, such as “Although mixed-ability classes can be challenging, they allow students to learn from one another.”

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