Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that children learn better when they are placed in classes with children of similar academic abilities. Others believe that children learn better when they are in classes with children representing a diverse range of academic abilities.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
nowadays, many individuals think that children learn more when they are in a room of same knowledge abilities while other believe that they learn more when they are with the more intelligent student. in the upcoming paragraph i will discuss about both views and give my opinion
on the one hand, A lot of people thing that children learn better when they do not feel pressured or compared with the fallows. their mind is not developed totally yet so when they saw a person is doing better than them maybe feel down because they feel like they are not aware of much information. for example, if a teacher question in class and a child do not know the answer but other give the answer loudly that can effect the student. also he or she might be scared of giving answer infront of everyone.
on the other hand, a range of individuals thing that kid see his or her friend doing well and prepared for everything. this might help them to get the courage to do better in class and focusing on studies. one good example for this is my friend little brother, he used to play video games all the time and don not cared about the marks until one of his friends got first position in final exam.
To conclude, both plays vital role in a children life however i believe that children are more curious when they see someone better than them in any field study and sports.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited. For instance, the argument regarding 'similar abilities' focuses primarily on emotional pressure rather than academic outcomes, and the second body paragraph relies on a single anecdotal example. To reach a higher band, you need to extend your arguments with more depth and provide more sophisticated reasoning. The task is addressed, but the ideas remain somewhat superficial and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand', 'to conclude'). There are instances where the flow between sentences is disjointed, such as the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, making the progression of ideas feel slightly repetitive. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive language such as 'learn more', 'doing better', and 'good example'. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'same knowledge abilities' instead of 'similar academic levels' and 'fallows' instead of 'peers'. To improve, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations that are appropriate for a formal essay, rather than relying on informal or inaccurate phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('a lot of people thing' instead of 'think'), missing articles, and incorrect verb tenses ('if a teacher question' instead of 'questions'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage is essential.
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