Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that children learn better when they are placed in classes with children of similar academic abilities. Others believe that children learn better when they are in classes with children representing a diverse range of academic abilities.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now a days technology development and so many different ways to learn for children.social media and online technical effects most in now a day our education system . different people have different reviews on learning.now a days children have different intrest and skills of learning.

Now a days both are best way to provide knowledge to the children.children who lean with the same age group they have also develop a different learning skills from other children and development strength and motivation and different learning styles from other same age group children.all children have a different age related milestone and exited to learn different things .

On the other side children learn better when thay have some mentor and some ideal person like which person who all children love and like . children want to follow their rules and regulations but some times some people like and some children not like that person . children have different thinking and mind set and some children have fear that children not sharing their thoughts and felling to the person .so all children not like to follow the same rules and regulations.

According to me today's children want to learn happily and want to free ..so they don't want to some people or other higher authority person to supervise children.now a days children want to learn free and intresting way.today different people have different ideas of learning and wonderful skills .

So depends of individual children and their different type of skills and knowledge all have different thoughts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the core prompt, which asks for a discussion on grouping children by 'similar academic abilities' versus 'diverse academic abilities'. Instead, the essay discusses technology, social media, and the general desire for children to learn 'freely' without supervision. Because the specific topic of ability grouping is not addressed, the response is largely off-topic. The ideas presented are disconnected from the prompt, and the position is unclear. To improve, you must carefully analyze the prompt's keywords and ensure your arguments directly relate to the specific educational debate presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused (e.g., 'On the other side' is used to introduce a point that does not contrast with the previous paragraph). Referencing is often unclear, making it hard for the reader to track the argument. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently' to link your ideas, and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that supports your main argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrases like 'now a days' and 'different'. There is a lack of academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to education or pedagogy. Many word choices are imprecise, such as 'technical effects' or 'exited to learn', which impede clarity. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'academic streaming', 'heterogeneous classrooms', or 'pedagogical approaches', and avoid repeating the same introductory phrases at the start of every sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often hinder communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'children who lean'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'felling' instead of 'feelings'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent misuse of ellipses and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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