Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrate on the numbers of candidate for different events at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the years 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Table tennis is high growth and other is little bit grow. Amateur dramatics is rapidly decrease.
2005 musical performances Slightly increase between 15 to 20 and Martial arts starts in 2000 between 2020 Fluctuated. Amateur dramatics start 2000 after that Decreased rapidly
Table tennis start in 2000 so 2010 to 2020 incresed significantly. film club is most populer but 2000 to 2020 Fluctuated.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You identify several relevant overall patterns: table tennis rises, amateur dramatics declines, and film club remains the most popular activity. However, the report is very brief and does not adequately summarise or compare the five series. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: musical performances begin at zero in 2000 and 2005, then rise to about 18 by 2020, rather than increasing from 15 to 20 in 2005. Table tennis grows especially strongly from 2010 to 2020, while martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s. The response contains 79 words, 71 below the 150-word minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are excluded. Include a clear overview and support it with accurate figures and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening sentence, an overview, and further comments on individual activities. This gives the reader some sense of the report’s purpose. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the final paragraph moves abruptly between musical performances, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and film club. The sentence beginning “2005 musical performances” is especially unclear, and there are few linking expressions to show how the trends relate. Use separate, logically grouped paragraphs—for example, one for the overview and one or two for the main comparisons—and connect ideas with clear phrases such as “by contrast” and “over the same period.”
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “Fluctuated,” “Decreased rapidly,” and “increased significantly,” so the reader can recognise the main changes you intend to report. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report awkward or unclear. For example, “candidate” does not describe the people shown in this graph; “participants” is appropriate. “Table tennis is high growth” is not a natural way to describe a trend, and “most populer” contains a spelling error. Aim for precise chart language, such as “rose sharply,” “declined steadily,” and “remained the most popular activity,” while checking spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts both simple statements and a longer sentence, and the basic meaning of some trends can be understood. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the relationships between time periods and activities difficult to interpret. For instance, “The graph illustrate on the numbers” has problems with the verb form and sentence construction, while “Amateur dramatics start 2000 after that Decreased rapidly” lacks clear tense, articles, and punctuation. Capitalisation within sentences is also inconsistent. Use the past tense consistently to describe the completed period, and build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Amateur dramatics fell from about 26 participants in 2000 to 6 in 2020.”
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