Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart below have information about the number of participant by years in Melbourne,Australia between 2000 untill 2020.

Firsly, as i see flim club and martial arts are steal constents at almost the same number of participants by years there is just a little of up and down of the numbers but steel the same band martial arts form 32 to 39 and film club btween 63 to 67 and there is table tennis who increases slwoly from 2000 to 2010 and then boost until 55 in 2020 and there is musical performances who was 0 from 2000 to 2005 and raise until 19 in 2020

Scendly, There is amatuer dramatics who beeing raise until 29 in 2005 and get down until 6 in 2020

As a result, there is alot of variable number of participants and that lead us to we should let go of lower numbers and ivest in high and constent numbers

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant patterns, including the film club’s broadly stable participation, table tennis’s strong rise, and amateur dramatics’ decline to about six. However, the response only partially summarises the graph: it gives no clear, separate overview of the main changes and does not compare the activities systematically. Some figures are also inaccurate or imprecise: table tennis rises sharply after 2010 rather than increasing slowly throughout, and musical performances reach about 18, not 19. The closing suggestion to “let go of lower numbers and invest” is not supported by the graph and shifts from reporting data to recommending action. Focus on the largest contrasts and describe them objectively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from several activities to amateur dramatics and then to a concluding statement. However, the progression is difficult to follow because most information is packed into one long paragraph, with only “Firsly” and “Scendly” marking stages. These sequencing words do not create clear comparisons, and the final “As a result” introduces an unsupported recommendation rather than summarising the trends. Group the information into an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing related series—for example, stable activities versus those that rose or fell. Use clear links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” to show how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “increases,” “raise,” and “get down,” so the reader can identify the general trends. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings make the report less clear, such as “constents,” “boost,” “variable number,” and “let go of lower numbers.” Some expressions are also unsuitable for a neutral data summary: “invest in high and constant numbers” gives advice rather than describing the graph. Use precise trend language and accurate activity names, such as “remained relatively stable,” “rose sharply,” and “declined steadily.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key labels, because errors in repeated terms can distract the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences using “and,” “but,” and “who,” but these structures are often faulty or difficult to follow. For example, “Firsly, as i see flim club and martial arts are steal constents” lacks controlled sentence structure, while “there is amatuer dramatics who beeing raise” has incorrect verb forms and agreement. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the number of participant by years” and the long run-on sentence describing several activities. Use a wider mix of short, accurate sentences and carefully controlled comparisons. For instance: “Film-club participation remained stable, while table-tennis numbers rose sharply after 2010.” Check capitalisation and sentence boundaries as well as verb forms.

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