Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the line graph illustrates data on the amount of participants for different activities happened in a one of Melbourne's social centre in Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Film club is the dominant activity in the centre,followed by martial arts who almost had steady amount of participants,next table tennis and musical performance had an increase but not the case for amateur dramatics,

Film club starts with the most amount of participants,continuing being the most favorite activity in the center till 2020.Next,martial arts which starts with almost 37 participant but overtook

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the graph’s subject and give a relevant overview: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis and musical performances rise, and amateur dramatics declines. However, the report is incomplete and covers the data only partially. It ends mid-sentence at “martial arts which starts with almost 37 participant but overtook,” so the martial-arts comparison is unfinished and several key changes are not reported. For example, table tennis climbs sharply from about 16 to 54, while amateur dramatics falls from around 26 to 6; these important figures would support your overview. The response also falls short of the required 150 words. Develop each main trend with accurate comparisons and figures, and finish the report with a complete summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then an overview, followed by a further detail paragraph. The sequence from the general picture to individual activities is appropriate. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is compressed into one long sentence, with several ideas joined mainly by commas. The final sentence is cut off, leaving the comparison about martial arts incomplete and the report without a clear ending. Linking expressions such as “Overall” and “Next” show an effort to guide the reader, but the relationships between trends are not consistently clear. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons with complete, clearly punctuated sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “dominant activity,” “steady,” “increase,” and “overtook.” These choices show an attempt to describe ranking and change rather than simply list activities. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are awkward or imprecise, such as “amount of participants,” “activities happened,” and “most favorite activity.” Repetition of “participants” and “activity” also limits variety. Choose standard collocations such as “number of participants,” “activities offered,” and “most popular activity.” You could also use a wider set of trend verbs, including “rose,” “declined,” and “fluctuated,” to make comparisons more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes both simple statements and an attempt at a more complex overview, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make parts difficult to read. For example, “Film club is the dominant activity in the centre,followed by martial arts who almost had steady amount” has unclear sentence construction, missing spacing after punctuation, and an incomplete idea. In “Film club starts with the most amount of participants,continuing being,” the verb pattern is faulty, and the sentence does not clearly express the trend. The final clause is also unfinished. Practise forming complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb patterns, and check punctuation before submitting.

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