Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

INTRODUCTION

The line graph illustrates Number of participants,by activity [redacted phone].They show the comparisons.

They mainly inform the number of participants maybe its a students to activity at social centre in melbourne,Australia for the duration of 2000 to 2020.

They are mainly divided into 5 parts.

Film club

Martial arts

Amateur dramatics

Table tennis

Musical performence

So, firstly we we talk about Film club they are mainly 65-66 participants.They have many increases or decreases when they start in 2000 they go and stop in 2005 analysis show they many little bit of decreases because maybe many people not like to film club and the percent were decreace. Then they are nin 2010 they little bit more decrease at the same in 2005 when they touch 2015 they increase just because many participant like and they grow about 68% when the last year touch its 2020 they more then 68% just because many participants like. Next one is Martial arts they have around 38 participants then they start the analysis they see many student dislike just beacuse of risk or any issue in 2005.When 2010 are coming they analyse many participants are intrested just because learning new things when 2015 are going on they show the same as the result in 2005 just beacuse of injury or more when 2020 coming many participants are join and enjoy to learning new think maybe the new participants and a new admission.We will come to next activity talk about Amateur dramastics they mainly 25-26 participants when they start they increase just beacuse of dramastics many people are join for a certificate when in 2010 many participant are leave this activity they thing this activity are wasting of time so they decreases for a 0 participants in 2020.Then we will dicuss about Table tennis only 15 people are participante this activity just because of injury or any issue but when its 2005 are come analysis show many people like its much beacuse of fitness and fun in 2010 are coming then no change or not join new participants but when its come to 2015 they show the percent of paticipant were increase or they have many new people are joining maybe be for a girls because many participants are girls when they playing tennis many people show or join.They increse in 2015 in 40 participants and in 2020 they almost touch the 55 or more.Last one is Musical performances they start in 2005 they mainly the new activity or late start they have no participants when 2010 are coming they mainly increase in 10-11 participants next year analysis are show then touch the 15-18 participants in 2015 the last one is 2020 they still in 19-20 participants.

This summarise show the information of selecting reports and comparision where relevant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all five activities and mention several broad movements, including table tennis rising and amateur dramatics declining. However, the response does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main features, and many figures or descriptions are misreported. For example, amateur dramatics falls to about 6 participants in 2020, not zero; film club remains broadly stable around 60–66, rather than reaching “68%”; and musical performances begin in 2000 at zero, not in 2005. The account also adds unsupported explanations about injuries, popularity, certificates and participants’ gender. To improve, select the key trends, compare them accurately, and report participant numbers rather than percentages or speculation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response introduces the graph and then discusses the activities in separate sequences, using markers such as “Next one” and “Last one.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the order of topics. However, there is no concise overview of the most important trends, and the long blocks of text make comparisons difficult to follow. Repeated phrases such as “when… are coming” and “they mainly” create mechanical links, while some references, including “they” and “they show,” are unclear. Grouping the information into a short introduction, an overview, and two focused detail paragraphs would create clearer progression. Compare related trends directly instead of narrating each activity with repeated transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increase,” “decrease,” and the activity names, so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to interpret. Examples include “they have many increases or decreases,” “the percent of participant,” and “new admission”; the graph reports numbers of people, not percentages or admissions. There are also spelling errors such as “performence,” “dramastics,” and “paticipant.” Use precise trend language and accurate nouns, and avoid inventing reasons for changes. A small set of well-controlled terms such as “remained stable,” “rose sharply,” and “fell steadily” would be more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences with time clauses and reasons, for example, “when they start in 2000” and “just because many participants like.” This shows some effort to go beyond isolated simple statements. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors in tense, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “They mainly inform the number,” “when 2010 are coming,” and “many participant are leave.” Several sentences run on without clear punctuation, particularly in the table-tennis section. Build accurate short sentences first, using past-tense verbs for the historical data, then add one controlled clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement and use full stops to separate distinct trends.

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