Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The graph below shows the participation of people in different activities such as Flimclub, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical instruments at a social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020

Overall, Flim club accounted for most number of participant for 2 decades while Musical performances had least number of participant. Amateur dramatics on the other hand showed sharp declination of participant overtime.

In 2000, Flim club started with 65 participants and remained with almost the same number of members over 2 decade with most popularity among 5 activities. Martial arts started with 36 members in 2000, showed little fluctuation in members in range 35-40 and ended up with around same number of participants. Table tennis on the other hand started with 15 participant in 2000, it showed steady growth till 2010 with almost 20 members, followed by straight jump to 65 members in 2020 bypassing Martial arts.

Amateur dramatics started with 25 memebers in 2000, In 2010 it reached its peak with 30 members followed by drastic reduction in members with just 10 members by 2020. Muscial performances started with 0 participants and remained same till 2005, from 2010 to 2020 it showed noticable growth and ended up with 19 members in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You provide a clear overview of the main patterns: the film club remains the most popular activity, musical performances begin at zero and rise, and amateur dramatics declines overall. Most figures and comparisons are grounded in the graph, including the broadly stable martial-arts numbers and table tennis’s strong growth. However, a few details are inaccurate: amateur dramatics peaks at about 28 in 2005, not 30 in 2010, and table tennis reaches about 54 in 2020 rather than 65. The overview also says musical performances had the fewest participants without clarifying that this is true for most of the period, not at the end, when amateur dramatics is lower. More precise reporting of these turning points would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping the activities. This makes the main trends easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “on the other hand,” “followed by,” and “while” help signal comparisons. The organisation is coherent, but some sentences carry several figures and changes at once, particularly the table-tennis sentence, which makes the progression less smooth. The repeated use of “started with” and “members” also makes the account feel somewhat formulaic. For a more controlled progression, group the rising and falling trends more deliberately, and use clearer references when comparing the final figures across activities.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “fluctuation,” “steady growth,” “sharp declination,” and “drastic reduction.” These choices communicate the broad patterns, though some are inaccurate or unnatural in this context: “declination” is less suitable than “decline,” and “straight jump” is not a natural collocation for a sharp increase. There are also spelling errors in “Flimclub,” “memebers,” and “Muscial,” alongside inconsistent naming such as “Musical instruments” for “Musical performances.” Repeated use of “members” and “participants” limits variety. Aim for accurate trend verbs and standard chart vocabulary, while checking spelling and using the activity labels consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while,” “followed by,” and “on the other hand.” The meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “most number of participant” has problems with the superlative construction and plural agreement, while “remained with almost the same number … over 2 decade” has awkward article and number patterns. The sentence beginning “Table tennis on the other hand started…” joins two independent clauses with a comma, and capitalisation after “In 2010” is inconsistent. Use more accurate noun phrases, check singular and plural forms, and separate or properly connect clauses. These corrections would make the varied sentence structures more controlled.

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