Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the information on the numbers of players for different hobbies at one community centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that the film club was the most popular activity. While, the table tennis shows increase dramatically. Whereas, the amateur dramatics is only thing to decrease.

In year 2000 the film club was approximately 64%. Then decrease around 2% in 2010 was 62%. Then also increase about 3% in 2020 was 65%. In 2000 the martial arts was 37% then 4% decrease in 2005 was approximately 33%. Again 5% increase in 2010 was around 38% and again decrease 3% in 2015 was around 35%. then again increase 1% in 2020 around 36%. Table tennis was 17% in 2000 then increase 2% in 2005 was around 19%. While remained the same in 2010. Then dramatically rose 33% in 2020 was around 52%.

Musical performances in 2000 to 2005 was 0%. Then increase 10% in 2010 was around 10%. Again increase 2% in 2015 was around 13%. Also increase 1% in 2020 was approximately 14%. Amateur dramatics was 26% in 2000. Then increase 2% in 2005 around 28%. Then suddenly drop 21% in 2020 was around 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall patterns: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines. You also include figures for all five activities, so the response is relevant and covers the chart. However, several details are inaccurate or incomplete: film club falls to about 60 in 2010, not 62, and then reaches about 66 in 2020; table tennis rises to about 54 in 2020, rather than 52; and amateur dramatics falls to about 6, not 7. The overview also says amateur dramatics is the only activity to decrease, overlooking the small fluctuations in film club and martial arts. Focus on the overall contrasts and report key values accurately, rather than describing every change as a percentage increase or decrease.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and detail about the activities. The information is generally grouped by series, which helps the reader follow the chart. However, progression within the detail is often mechanical: repeated sequences such as “Then,” “Again” and “Then again” make the account read like a list of changes rather than a comparison. Some links are also awkward or incomplete, including “While remained the same in 2010” and “Whereas, the amateur dramatics is only thing to decrease.” Use clearer paragraphing to group the rising, falling and relatively stable activities, and connect figures with accurate contrast and comparison phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “approximately,” “dramatically,” “decrease” and “rose,” and the reader can usually understand the trends you intend to describe. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise for this graph. The figures represent numbers of participants, not percentages, so repeated use of “%” is misleading. “Players” and “hobbies” are also less suitable than “participants” and “activities” in this context. Repetition of “increase” and “decrease” limits flexibility, while phrases such as “the only thing to decrease” sound informal and imprecise. Build a wider set of accurate trend expressions and use them consistently with participant numbers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use time references to describe changes, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined in repetitive ways, and errors occur frequently. Examples include “While, the table tennis shows increase dramatically,” “In year 2000 the film club was approximately 64%,” and “Musical performances in 2000 to 2005 was 0%.” These show problems with sentence construction, articles, tense and subject–verb agreement. The fragment “While remained the same in 2010” also lacks a clear subject. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense reporting consistently, for example, “Table tennis remained stable at 20 participants in 2005 and 2010.”

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